I recently made a custome race and I'd like some feedback before I do anything with it.
All the info on it is below. ( I copied it from a google doc so It dosint look nice and sorry.)
Quick Background on the Demon Race: The demon race is a powerful and ancient race of beings that reside in another dimension. They are known for their incredible physical and magical abilities, as well as their cunning and manipulative nature. Demons are only able to appear on other worlds when they are summoned by a person who has made a deal with them, usually in exchange for a soul or some other form of payment. The Three Subraces of Demons: The demon race is divided into three subraces: Lesser Demons, Greater Demons, and Primordial Demons. Each subrace possesses unique abilities and strengths. Lesser Demons: Lesser demons are the weakest of the demon subraces, but they are still formidable opponents. They are known for their agility and speed, as well as their ability to deceive and trick their enemies. Lesser demons also have the ability to transform into a more powerful demon form at level 10. Their unique abilities include: Deception: Lesser demons have a natural talent for deception and trickery, allowing them to confuse and mislead their enemies. Trickery: Similar to deception, lesser demons are skilled at trickery and pranks, making them difficult to predict in battle. Lesser Demon Transformation: At level 10, a lesser demon can transform into a more powerful demon form, increasing their physical strength and magical abilities. Greater Demons: Greater demons are more physically powerful than lesser demons, but they are unable to use high-level magic unless they have evolved from a lesser demon that reached level 10. Greater demons are known for their strength and durability, making them formidable opponents on the battlefield. Their unique abilities include: Physical Strength: Greater demons are incredibly strong, able to lift heavy objects and deal devastating blows in battle. Durability: Greater demons are more durable than other demons, able to withstand a lot of damage before being defeated. High-Level Magic (Evolved): If a greater demon evolved from a lesser demon that reached level 10, it will have access to high-level magic. otherwise it will Only be able to use debuff and strength boosting Spells. Primordial Demons: Primordial demons are the most powerful and rarest of the demon subraces. They possess incredible magical abilities, including the ability to manipulate certain aspects of reality. Primordial demons are intelligent and cunning, able to manipulate others to their will. Their unique abilities include: Vermona Magic: Primordial demons are incredibly skilled in the use of vermona magic, allowing them to manipulate reality to a certain extent. Intelligence: Primordial demons are incredibly intelligent and cunning, able to outsmart their enemies with ease. Persuasion: Primordial demons have a natural talent for persuasion, able to convince others to do their bidding. Demon Hierarchy: The demon race operates under a strict hierarchy, with greater demons serving as the nobility and primordial demons serving as the rare and powerful leaders. Lesser demons are at the bottom of the hierarchy, but they still hold a place in demon society as common soldiers and workers. Stats Lesser Demons Size: Small Ability Score Increase: Dexterity +2, Charisma +1 Speed: 30ft. Darkvision: 60ft. Skills: Choose two from Deception, Stealth, Persuasion Infernal Legacy: Cantrip (Thaumaturgy), 1st level spell (Hellish Rebuke) once per long rest Trickery: Gain proficiency with one of the following: Sleight of Hand, Deception, or Stealth Greater Demons Size: large Ability Score Increase: Strength +2, Constitution +1 Speed: 30ft. Darkvision: 60ft. Skills: Choose two from Intimidation, Athletics, Survival Infernal Legacy: Cantrip (Thaumaturgy), 1st level spell (Burning Hands) once per long rest Battle Focus: Can take a bonus action to focus their mind, granting advantage on the next attack roll made with a melee weapon Primordial Demons Size: Medium Ability Score Increase: Intelligence +2, Wisdom +1 Speed: 30ft. Darkvision: 120ft. Skills: Choose two from Arcana, History, Insight, Investigation, Religion Infernal Legacy: Cantrip (Thaumaturgy), 1st level spell (Disguise Self) once per long rest Reality Manipulation: Can cast the spell Universal Suggestion, allowing them to manipulate certain aspects of reality at the cost of gold pieces and concentration Note that these are just guidelines, and players are free to adjust these stats as needed to fit their own games and campaigns. unique skills 1. Universal suggestion is a powerful spell that allows Primordial Demons to manipulate certain aspects of reality. This spell enables the user to suggest changes to reality instantaneously, but it comes with a heavy cost. Each time the user casts the spell, they must pay a significant amount of energy, represented by a permanent payment. The user can also make permanent changes by making another permanent payment, which is necessary for any changes outside of the current battle. This spell requires immense power and knowledg
I recently made a custome race and I'd like some feedback before I do anything with it.
All the info on it is below. ( I copied it from a google doc so It dosint look nice and sorry.)
Quick Background on the Demon Race: The demon race is a powerful and ancient race of beings that reside in another dimension. They are known for their incredible physical and magical abilities, as well as their cunning and manipulative nature. Demons are only able to appear on other worlds when they are summoned by a person who has made a deal with them, usually in exchange for a soul or some other form of payment. The Three Subraces of Demons: The demon race is divided into three subraces: Lesser Demons, Greater Demons, and Primordial Demons. Each subrace possesses unique abilities and strengths. Lesser Demons: Lesser demons are the weakest of the demon subraces, but they are still formidable opponents. They are known for their agility and speed, as well as their ability to deceive and trick their enemies. Lesser demons also have the ability to transform into a more powerful demon form at level 10. Their unique abilities include: Deception: Lesser demons have a natural talent for deception and trickery, allowing them to confuse and mislead their enemies. Trickery: Similar to deception, lesser demons are skilled at trickery and pranks, making them difficult to predict in battle. Lesser Demon Transformation: At level 10, a lesser demon can transform into a more powerful demon form, increasing their physical strength and magical abilities. Greater Demons: Greater demons are more physically powerful than lesser demons, but they are unable to use high-level magic unless they have evolved from a lesser demon that reached level 10. Greater demons are known for their strength and durability, making them formidable opponents on the battlefield. Their unique abilities include: Physical Strength: Greater demons are incredibly strong, able to lift heavy objects and deal devastating blows in battle. Durability: Greater demons are more durable than other demons, able to withstand a lot of damage before being defeated. High-Level Magic (Evolved): If a greater demon evolved from a lesser demon that reached level 10, it will have access to high-level magic. otherwise it will Only be able to use debuff and strength boosting Spells. Primordial Demons: Primordial demons are the most powerful and rarest of the demon subraces. They possess incredible magical abilities, including the ability to manipulate certain aspects of reality. Primordial demons are intelligent and cunning, able to manipulate others to their will. Their unique abilities include: Vermona Magic: Primordial demons are incredibly skilled in the use of vermona magic, allowing them to manipulate reality to a certain extent. Intelligence: Primordial demons are incredibly intelligent and cunning, able to outsmart their enemies with ease. Persuasion: Primordial demons have a natural talent for persuasion, able to convince others to do their bidding. Demon Hierarchy: The demon race operates under a strict hierarchy, with greater demons serving as the nobility and primordial demons serving as the rare and powerful leaders. Lesser demons are at the bottom of the hierarchy, but they still hold a place in demon society as common soldiers and workers. Stats Lesser Demons Size: Small Ability Score Increase: Dexterity +2, Charisma +1 Speed: 30ft. Darkvision: 60ft. Skills: Choose two from Deception, Stealth, Persuasion Infernal Legacy: Cantrip (Thaumaturgy), 1st level spell (Hellish Rebuke) once per long rest Trickery: Gain proficiency with one of the following: Sleight of Hand, Deception, or Stealth Greater Demons Size: large Ability Score Increase: Strength +2, Constitution +1 Speed: 30ft. Darkvision: 60ft. Skills: Choose two from Intimidation, Athletics, Survival Infernal Legacy: Cantrip (Thaumaturgy), 1st level spell (Burning Hands) once per long rest Battle Focus: Can take a bonus action to focus their mind, granting advantage on the next attack roll made with a melee weapon Primordial Demons Size: Medium Ability Score Increase: Intelligence +2, Wisdom +1 Speed: 30ft. Darkvision: 120ft. Skills: Choose two from Arcana, History, Insight, Investigation, Religion Infernal Legacy: Cantrip (Thaumaturgy), 1st level spell (Disguise Self) once per long rest Reality Manipulation: Can cast the spell Universal Suggestion, allowing them to manipulate certain aspects of reality at the cost of gold pieces and concentration Note that these are just guidelines, and players are free to adjust these stats as needed to fit their own games and campaigns. unique skills 1. Universal suggestion is a powerful spell that allows Primordial Demons to manipulate certain aspects of reality. This spell enables the user to suggest changes to reality instantaneously, but it comes with a heavy cost. Each time the user casts the spell, they must pay a significant amount of energy, represented by a permanent payment. The user can also make permanent changes by making another permanent payment, which is necessary for any changes outside of the current battle. This spell requires immense power and knowledg
Are you new to D&D? If so, nice job for your first homebrew, it seems fairly balanced. A few things: the wording is a bit unclear; usually you wouldn’t change subraces as you level up; no player races are large, so you may want to change that; the higher level spells are usually restricted to 3rd level for 1st level spells and 5th level for 2nd level spells; and the whole race seems kind of unnecessary because Tiefling exists, and you could just reflavor it.
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I recently made a custome race and I'd like some feedback before I do anything with it.
All the info on it is below. ( I copied it from a google doc so It dosint look nice and sorry.)
Quick Background on the Demon Race: The demon race is a powerful and ancient race of beings that reside in another dimension. They are known for their incredible physical and magical abilities, as well as their cunning and manipulative nature. Demons are only able to appear on other worlds when they are summoned by a person who has made a deal with them, usually in exchange for a soul or some other form of payment. The Three Subraces of Demons: The demon race is divided into three subraces: Lesser Demons, Greater Demons, and Primordial Demons. Each subrace possesses unique abilities and strengths. Lesser Demons: Lesser demons are the weakest of the demon subraces, but they are still formidable opponents. They are known for their agility and speed, as well as their ability to deceive and trick their enemies. Lesser demons also have the ability to transform into a more powerful demon form at level 10. Their unique abilities include: Deception: Lesser demons have a natural talent for deception and trickery, allowing them to confuse and mislead their enemies. Trickery: Similar to deception, lesser demons are skilled at trickery and pranks, making them difficult to predict in battle. Lesser Demon Transformation: At level 10, a lesser demon can transform into a more powerful demon form, increasing their physical strength and magical abilities. Greater Demons: Greater demons are more physically powerful than lesser demons, but they are unable to use high-level magic unless they have evolved from a lesser demon that reached level 10. Greater demons are known for their strength and durability, making them formidable opponents on the battlefield. Their unique abilities include: Physical Strength: Greater demons are incredibly strong, able to lift heavy objects and deal devastating blows in battle. Durability: Greater demons are more durable than other demons, able to withstand a lot of damage before being defeated. High-Level Magic (Evolved): If a greater demon evolved from a lesser demon that reached level 10, it will have access to high-level magic. otherwise it will Only be able to use debuff and strength boosting Spells. Primordial Demons: Primordial demons are the most powerful and rarest of the demon subraces. They possess incredible magical abilities, including the ability to manipulate certain aspects of reality. Primordial demons are intelligent and cunning, able to manipulate others to their will. Their unique abilities include: Vermona Magic: Primordial demons are incredibly skilled in the use of vermona magic, allowing them to manipulate reality to a certain extent. Intelligence: Primordial demons are incredibly intelligent and cunning, able to outsmart their enemies with ease. Persuasion: Primordial demons have a natural talent for persuasion, able to convince others to do their bidding. Demon Hierarchy: The demon race operates under a strict hierarchy, with greater demons serving as the nobility and primordial demons serving as the rare and powerful leaders. Lesser demons are at the bottom of the hierarchy, but they still hold a place in demon society as common soldiers and workers. Stats Lesser Demons Size: Small Ability Score Increase: Dexterity +2, Charisma +1 Speed: 30ft. Darkvision: 60ft. Skills: Choose two from Deception, Stealth, Persuasion Infernal Legacy: Cantrip (Thaumaturgy), 1st level spell (Hellish Rebuke) once per long rest Trickery: Gain proficiency with one of the following: Sleight of Hand, Deception, or Stealth Greater Demons Size: large Ability Score Increase: Strength +2, Constitution +1 Speed: 30ft. Darkvision: 60ft. Skills: Choose two from Intimidation, Athletics, Survival Infernal Legacy: Cantrip (Thaumaturgy), 1st level spell (Burning Hands) once per long rest Battle Focus: Can take a bonus action to focus their mind, granting advantage on the next attack roll made with a melee weapon Primordial Demons Size: Medium Ability Score Increase: Intelligence +2, Wisdom +1 Speed: 30ft. Darkvision: 120ft. Skills: Choose two from Arcana, History, Insight, Investigation, Religion Infernal Legacy: Cantrip (Thaumaturgy), 1st level spell (Disguise Self) once per long rest Reality Manipulation: Can cast the spell Universal Suggestion, allowing them to manipulate certain aspects of reality at the cost of gold pieces and concentration Note that these are just guidelines, and players are free to adjust these stats as needed to fit their own games and campaigns. unique skills 1. Universal suggestion is a powerful spell that allows Primordial Demons to manipulate certain aspects of reality. This spell enables the user to suggest changes to reality instantaneously, but it comes with a heavy cost. Each time the user casts the spell, they must pay a significant amount of energy, represented by a permanent payment. The user can also make permanent changes by making another permanent payment, which is necessary for any changes outside of the current battle. This spell requires immense power and knowledg
Are you new to D&D? If so, nice job for your first homebrew, it seems fairly balanced. A few things: the wording is a bit unclear; usually you wouldn’t change subraces as you level up; no player races are large, so you may want to change that; the higher level spells are usually restricted to 3rd level for 1st level spells and 5th level for 2nd level spells; and the whole race seems kind of unnecessary because Tiefling exists, and you could just reflavor it.