I'm working on a subclass that is 95% Dael Kingsmill's Beast Master Redux, and wanted to clarify and reduce the AoE of an ability. Here's the original text of one of the options:
Your animal companion weaves through the battlefield around you, staying close and lashing out at any unfriendly creature that approaches. You may spend 2 Maneuver Points to use your bonus action and your beast’s reaction, commanding your companion keep guard in a 20ft radius zone around you. Until the beginning of your next turn your animal companion will protect that zone, allowing it to make unlimited attacks of opportunity against enemies passing through the area. You may spend your bonus action and your beast’s action to continue this maneuver on subsequent turns.
And here's the changes I've made with it:
Your animal companion weaves through the battlefield around you, staying close and lashing out at any unfriendly creature that approaches. You may spend 2 Maneuver Points to use your bonus action and your beast’s reaction, commanding your companion keep guard in a 15ft radius zone centered around you. Until the beginning of your next turn your animal companion will protect that zone, allowing it to make unlimited attacks of opportunity against enemies passing through the area (one attack per enemy). Your animal companion must use its movement to reach the 15ft zone around you, but does not consume its movement within the 15ft zone. You may spend your bonus action and your beast’s action to continue this maneuver on subsequent turns.
Do the changes I've made clarify the action? Does it make sense?
I'm really late replying to this (I just saw it while trying to take a google shortcut to the GM Binder doc) but I really like these changes. The 15ft radius makes way more sense and the one OA per enemy was the RAI but definitely unclear in my version. Could I use some of these changes and add a credit to you in the original document?
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I'm working on a subclass that is 95% Dael Kingsmill's Beast Master Redux, and wanted to clarify and reduce the AoE of an ability. Here's the original text of one of the options:
And here's the changes I've made with it:
Do the changes I've made clarify the action? Does it make sense?
I'm really late replying to this (I just saw it while trying to take a google shortcut to the GM Binder doc) but I really like these changes. The 15ft radius makes way more sense and the one OA per enemy was the RAI but definitely unclear in my version. Could I use some of these changes and add a credit to you in the original document?