i have no where else to go but up here and ask for help. this is my first time up here and i usually don't ask for help but i can't think. i've been working on this fighter subclass called the Spear Wanderer
the Spear Wanderer fighter subclass uses stances. stances use spirit points for special attacks and techniques called styles. oh and they use polearms for this.
i mostly need help with the stances but if you have anything on the subclass features. all stances should have three styles
This needs a lot of work. Here are some general comments.
#1. You have a lot of confusing wordings. For example, try rewording last sentence of first power to. "You cannot use this ability if you are Blinded, Deafened, or Incapacitated." Take some time, you need a lot of work to fix everything.
#2 Do not call the ability Spear Stance and then name the the rest things like Turtle Stance, etc. It looks like Spear Stance is the only stance until you read the later pages. Try instead naming the ability "The Many Stances of The Spears."
#3 A 7th level ability that grants AC bonus when unarmored is kind of silly. By 7th level you already have armor, probably magical. You are not going to want to use it. Replace it with something else or make it the first level ability.
#4 You make it all about spears, then of the stances, only the first actually uses your spear. That is just silly. Either make them all about the weapons, or just drop the requirement that it is a spear like weapon.
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i have no where else to go but up here and ask for help. this is my first time up here and i usually don't ask for help but i can't think.
i've been working on this fighter subclass called the Spear Wanderer
the Spear Wanderer fighter subclass uses stances. stances use spirit points for special attacks and techniques called styles. oh and they use polearms for this.
i mostly need help with the stances but if you have anything on the subclass features. all stances should have three styles
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This needs a lot of work. Here are some general comments.
#1. You have a lot of confusing wordings. For example, try rewording last sentence of first power to. "You cannot use this ability if you are Blinded, Deafened, or Incapacitated." Take some time, you need a lot of work to fix everything.
#2 Do not call the ability Spear Stance and then name the the rest things like Turtle Stance, etc. It looks like Spear Stance is the only stance until you read the later pages. Try instead naming the ability "The Many Stances of The Spears."
#3 A 7th level ability that grants AC bonus when unarmored is kind of silly. By 7th level you already have armor, probably magical. You are not going to want to use it. Replace it with something else or make it the first level ability.
#4 You make it all about spears, then of the stances, only the first actually uses your spear. That is just silly. Either make them all about the weapons, or just drop the requirement that it is a spear like weapon.