l am makeing a feat,and l want help with wording. And before you ask,yes,l know this is over powered. It's meant for a non serous oneshot,and the character is based on lelouch from code geass. That said,advice for balancing it is fine,but please focus on makeing the wording better.
As a action,you can cast one of the following spells at will and without using a spell slot,but you can't use this ability on someone more then once. Additionally, you must be looking into their eyes,and the target must understand what you are saying. This ability bypasses immunity to being charmed,and spells cast with this ability do not require concentration,targets auto fail any saving throw to resist,all AOE effects only effect those who's eyes you can see,and all effects last indefinitely,or until a Greater Restoration or Wish spell is used on them. All other rules for the spells must be followed.
Charm Person, Sleep,Suggestion,Zone of truth,Dominate Person,Geas,Modify Memory,Mass Suggestion,Otto's Irresistible Dance,Feeblemind,Power Word Kill.
Make each thought its own sentence--there are a lot of sentences joined by commas. Add spaces after any commas you do use. Spell check your work using software.
Put space (hit "enter") in between sections so it is not just a giant wall of text. Here is an example of what I mean.
Original:
"As a action,you can cast one of the following spells at will and without using a spell slot,but you can't use this ability on someone more then once."
New:
"As a action, you can cast one of the following spells at will, and without using a spell slot:
Charm Person, Sleep, Suggestion, Zone of truth, Dominate Person, Geas, Modify Memory, Mass Suggestion, Otto's Irresistible Dance, Feeblemind, Power Word Kill.
You can't use this ability on someone more than* once."
-"whose" (possession), not "who's" (which means "who is")
-spelling: "making" instead of "makeing" (drop "e" for "ing" ending)
-say "effects only affect," not "effects only effect"
English grammar and spelling are a nightmare, but it is what it is.
Is this a level 20 feat or something? I would agree it's crazy overpowered, but if your DM approves it, they approve it.
I admit it would be kinda funny if the BBG in the one shot had no eyes, or simply couldn't understand, and thus couldn't be affected. So I guess it's overpowered, but super easy to counter.
l am makeing a feat,and l want help with wording. And before you ask,yes,l know this is over powered. It's meant for a non serous oneshot,and the character is based on lelouch from code geass. That said,advice for balancing it is fine,but please focus on makeing the wording better.
As a action,you can cast one of the following spells at will and without using a spell slot,but you can't use this ability on someone more then once. Additionally, you must be looking into their eyes,and the target must understand what you are saying. This ability bypasses immunity to being charmed,and spells cast with this ability do not require concentration,targets auto fail any saving throw to resist,all AOE effects only effect those who's eyes you can see,and all effects last indefinitely,or until a Greater Restoration or Wish spell is used on them. All other rules for the spells must be followed.
Charm Person, Sleep,Suggestion,Zone of truth,Dominate Person,Geas,Modify Memory,Mass Suggestion,Otto's Irresistible Dance,Feeblemind,Power Word Kill.
Make each thought its own sentence--there are a lot of sentences joined by commas. Add spaces after any commas you do use. Spell check your work using software.
Put space (hit "enter") in between sections so it is not just a giant wall of text. Here is an example of what I mean.
Original:
"As a action,you can cast one of the following spells at will and without using a spell slot,but you can't use this ability on someone more then once."
New:
"As a action, you can cast one of the following spells at will, and without using a spell slot:
Charm Person, Sleep, Suggestion, Zone of truth, Dominate Person, Geas, Modify Memory, Mass Suggestion, Otto's Irresistible Dance, Feeblemind, Power Word Kill.
You can't use this ability on someone more than* once."
*use than, not then
Good luck!
Also,
-"whose" (possession), not "who's" (which means "who is")
-spelling: "making" instead of "makeing" (drop "e" for "ing" ending)
-say "effects only affect," not "effects only effect"
English grammar and spelling are a nightmare, but it is what it is.
Is this a level 20 feat or something? I would agree it's crazy overpowered, but if your DM approves it, they approve it.
I admit it would be kinda funny if the BBG in the one shot had no eyes, or simply couldn't understand, and thus couldn't be affected. So I guess it's overpowered, but super easy to counter.