So i'm a writer, and i need some advice. I'm writing a story where a character gets really serious electrical burns from some sort of electrical weapon. In theory, this leaves the character with bad electrical burns on their face, neck, and shoulders. I want a plotline where the character has to come to terms with being scarred, because they're not shallow by nature, but they perceive themselves as not having many talents or skills. They've always been nothing but a pretty face, so now that they (in their perception) aren't pretty anymore, they don't think they have anything else going for them. Lots of character development and growth etc, but there's a problem. I have no idea how electrical burns work. I don't know how they scar, what they look like determined by how they happened, if they're anything like thermal burns. There's lots of guides to writing burns, but not electrical burns, so if anyone knows anything about this topic, i'd appreciate the help.
Electrical burns sort of look like regular burns, to my knowledge. They leave lots of visible scar tissue and depending on how they got them, you could describe it like:
“I dragged my eyes back up to the glittering, pristine mirror, a tauntingly perfect surface so eagerly showing me the face of a now-turned-stranger, of an alien, of..me. I traced a finger absently, a performative act of self consolation, along the marred lines separating the gentle, the innocent, the face of me and the disfigured scar tissue arcing like stretches of lightning down the curve of my cheek, pausing just under the eye, down the pronounced cupid’s bow of my lips, to the bubble-like scar tissue where the tip of my upper lip once was - slightly pursed, accompanying the furrow seen on my brow. Fractured lines like marble, a fleshy pink with bloodied vessels just below the skin, it was both morbidly disgusting to face, and yet completely captivating.” or something like that. it doesn’t need to be fully to the detail described, especially if your character would hate looking at themselves. Writing other people’s reactions to it helps I think
Frick that's good man
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I'm fry, and I make doodles. That's why they call me FRY DOODLES. Also no pressure but check out my YouTube channel (Fry Doodles) I'm a disabled, neurodivergent, artsy dumpster fire who's always open to chat. I'm a sensitive little sad bean, and somewhat of a clown. But, I'm also god's favorite princess and the most interesting girl in the world. Crafter of Constellations, vocaloid enjoyer, waluigi’s #1 fan, space alien, princess-of-quite-a-lot, and certified silly goose
Ever since I could take the bandages off, I wish they had stayed on. I’d covered up all the mirrors in my room when I could still look in them without choking, but that wasn’t enough. Windows, puddles, the cups of coffee I couldn’t finish, they were all mocking me with glimpses of what I had become. And so I shut myself in my room, drew the curtains, and closed my eyes. I was practically hiding from myself. A fitting fate for someone who always hides, I thought.
Of course I knew this couldn’t go on forever. Sooner or later, I’d be called back to Compass. But how could I face my friends if I couldn’t even face myself?
I found myself standing in front of my mirror, staring at the sheet I’d used to block out my reflection, daring myself to peel it away. Anger bubbled up in my throat, at the circumstances, at the mirror, at how unbelivably stupid I was being. Anger, then grief, then the overwhelming numbness that had followed me these past few weeks.
I tugged on the corner of the sheet and watched as white gave way into reality. There she was, the stranger who’d replaced me, looking back at me with eyes that were supposed to belong to me. Untidy blonde curls hung limp on her shoulders, peppered with singed bits that I hadn’t gotten around to doing anything about yet. And her face…
It was almost as if the mirror had shattered when it saw me. But, of course, the mirror wasn’t broken. I was. Ugly pink marks snaked up from my shoulders, twisting and arcing like lightning as they coiled around my neck. Their spread seemed to stop just before it reaching my left eye, but crooked branches broke off towards my mouth. My fingers traced the lines dividing my face from the stranger’s as if searching for the right thread to pull that would untangle the whole knotted mess.
Finally, I couldn’t look any longer. I draped the sheet back over the mirror, hiding myself from the stranger in the glass.
I've done it, thank you for your help
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I'm fry, and I make doodles. That's why they call me FRY DOODLES. Also no pressure but check out my YouTube channel (Fry Doodles) I'm a disabled, neurodivergent, artsy dumpster fire who's always open to chat. I'm a sensitive little sad bean, and somewhat of a clown. But, I'm also god's favorite princess and the most interesting girl in the world. Crafter of Constellations, vocaloid enjoyer, waluigi’s #1 fan, space alien, princess-of-quite-a-lot, and certified silly goose
— δ cyno • he/him • number one paladin fanδ — pretend I have something cool here ——————| EXTENDED SIG |—————— Φ • redpelt’s biggest fan :) DM, minmaxer, microbiology student, and lover of anything colored red • Φ
I'm fry, and I make doodles. That's why they call me FRY DOODLES. Also no pressure but check out my YouTube channel (Fry Doodles) I'm a disabled, neurodivergent, artsy dumpster fire who's always open to chat. I'm a sensitive little sad bean, and somewhat of a clown. But, I'm also god's favorite princess and the most interesting girl in the world. Crafter of Constellations, vocaloid enjoyer, waluigi’s #1 fan, space alien, princess-of-quite-a-lot, and certified silly goose
My titles are the great Silver Dragon Lord of the Sky, Second in Command of the Dragon Cult, High Warlock of Cynophobia, High Cultist of Jeff, The Lightning Mage. I’m a ✨Chronically online teenage boy✨, and one of the most active posters on the forums (MORE THAN SALEM AND GONZALO). Always open to talk if you’d like to shoot me a PM! Please don’t hesitate to tell me I’m being a jerk or overbearing, I love helpful feedback! Love y’all!
Yo, I'm Himy (He/him) not as active as I use to be, but I'm here from time to time. I don't got much else to say.
"From the stars of the inner sea, from the tower of insight, from the four corners of paradise, let them know; their story is filled with blessings. Only those free of sin may pass... Garden of Avalon!”
”The elements coalesce, amalgamate, and bring forth the star that interweaves all creation. Bow down with death! Enuma Elish!”
My titles are the great Silver Dragon Lord of the Sky, Second in Command of the Dragon Cult, High Warlock of Cynophobia, High Cultist of Jeff, The Lightning Mage. I’m a ✨Chronically online teenage boy✨, and one of the most active posters on the forums (MORE THAN SALEM AND GONZALO). Always open to talk if you’d like to shoot me a PM! Please don’t hesitate to tell me I’m being a jerk or overbearing, I love helpful feedback! Love y’all!
Felt like screaming and remembered I could change the font size. :D
Yay
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My titles are the great Silver Dragon Lord of the Sky, Second in Command of the Dragon Cult, High Warlock of Cynophobia, High Cultist of Jeff, The Lightning Mage. I’m a ✨Chronically online teenage boy✨, and one of the most active posters on the forums (MORE THAN SALEM AND GONZALO). Always open to talk if you’d like to shoot me a PM! Please don’t hesitate to tell me I’m being a jerk or overbearing, I love helpful feedback! Love y’all!
I hate having characters I want to rp but no place I can really place them into to be able to rp.
Me tooooooo. I wish there were more taverns.
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My titles are the great Silver Dragon Lord of the Sky, Second in Command of the Dragon Cult, High Warlock of Cynophobia, High Cultist of Jeff, The Lightning Mage. I’m a ✨Chronically online teenage boy✨, and one of the most active posters on the forums (MORE THAN SALEM AND GONZALO). Always open to talk if you’d like to shoot me a PM! Please don’t hesitate to tell me I’m being a jerk or overbearing, I love helpful feedback! Love y’all!
I kind of want to make a new, more blanket fantasy tavern, but I'm running low on inspiration right now.
Inspiration is hard. :(. I have a tavern ready to release, kind of a city fantasy tavern, but I’m not sure if people will be interested in it or not.
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My titles are the great Silver Dragon Lord of the Sky, Second in Command of the Dragon Cult, High Warlock of Cynophobia, High Cultist of Jeff, The Lightning Mage. I’m a ✨Chronically online teenage boy✨, and one of the most active posters on the forums (MORE THAN SALEM AND GONZALO). Always open to talk if you’d like to shoot me a PM! Please don’t hesitate to tell me I’m being a jerk or overbearing, I love helpful feedback! Love y’all!
I kind of want to make a new, more blanket fantasy tavern, but I'm running low on inspiration right now.
I'm sorry it's taking a while to find inspiration. Hope you find the idea soon. :)
Thank you, Yvonne.
I've been trying to make a character for Dungeon of the Mad Mage lately, and so far I have found no success. It's a family game, so I need to make sure things aren't too gory or spooky, and I also have to fit in with Forgotten Realms lore, which I pretty much never studied because I'm genuinely not interested.
Frick that's good man
I'm fry, and I make doodles. That's why they call me FRY DOODLES. Also no pressure but check out my YouTube channel (Fry Doodles)
I'm a disabled, neurodivergent, artsy dumpster fire who's always open to chat.
I'm a sensitive little sad bean, and somewhat of a clown. But, I'm also god's favorite princess and the most interesting girl in the world.
Crafter of Constellations, vocaloid enjoyer, waluigi’s #1 fan, space alien, princess-of-quite-a-lot, and certified silly goose
Ever since I could take the bandages off, I wish they had stayed on. I’d covered up all the mirrors in my room when I could still look in them without choking, but that wasn’t enough. Windows, puddles, the cups of coffee I couldn’t finish, they were all mocking me with glimpses of what I had become. And so I shut myself in my room, drew the curtains, and closed my eyes. I was practically hiding from myself. A fitting fate for someone who always hides, I thought.
Of course I knew this couldn’t go on forever. Sooner or later, I’d be called back to Compass. But how could I face my friends if I couldn’t even face myself?
I found myself standing in front of my mirror, staring at the sheet I’d used to block out my reflection, daring myself to peel it away. Anger bubbled up in my throat, at the circumstances, at the mirror, at how unbelivably stupid I was being. Anger, then grief, then the overwhelming numbness that had followed me these past few weeks.
I tugged on the corner of the sheet and watched as white gave way into reality. There she was, the stranger who’d replaced me, looking back at me with eyes that were supposed to belong to me. Untidy blonde curls hung limp on her shoulders, peppered with singed bits that I hadn’t gotten around to doing anything about yet. And her face…
It was almost as if the mirror had shattered when it saw me. But, of course, the mirror wasn’t broken. I was. Ugly pink marks snaked up from my shoulders, twisting and arcing like lightning as they coiled around my neck. Their spread seemed to stop just before it reaching my left eye, but crooked branches broke off towards my mouth. My fingers traced the lines dividing my face from the stranger’s as if searching for the right thread to pull that would untangle the whole knotted mess.
Finally, I couldn’t look any longer. I draped the sheet back over the mirror, hiding myself from the stranger in the glass.
I've done it, thank you for your help
I'm fry, and I make doodles. That's why they call me FRY DOODLES. Also no pressure but check out my YouTube channel (Fry Doodles)
I'm a disabled, neurodivergent, artsy dumpster fire who's always open to chat.
I'm a sensitive little sad bean, and somewhat of a clown. But, I'm also god's favorite princess and the most interesting girl in the world.
Crafter of Constellations, vocaloid enjoyer, waluigi’s #1 fan, space alien, princess-of-quite-a-lot, and certified silly goose
looks awesome :)
— δ cyno • he/him • number one paladin fan δ —
pretend I have something cool here
——————| EXTENDED SIG |——————
Φ • redpelt’s biggest fan :) DM, minmaxer, microbiology student, and lover of anything colored red • Φ
Thanks
I'm fry, and I make doodles. That's why they call me FRY DOODLES. Also no pressure but check out my YouTube channel (Fry Doodles)
I'm a disabled, neurodivergent, artsy dumpster fire who's always open to chat.
I'm a sensitive little sad bean, and somewhat of a clown. But, I'm also god's favorite princess and the most interesting girl in the world.
Crafter of Constellations, vocaloid enjoyer, waluigi’s #1 fan, space alien, princess-of-quite-a-lot, and certified silly goose
My dog got a pride bandana and now I’m happy.
My titles are the great Silver Dragon Lord of the Sky, Second in Command of the Dragon Cult, High Warlock of Cynophobia, High Cultist of Jeff, The Lightning Mage. I’m a ✨Chronically online teenage boy✨, and one of the most active posters on the forums (MORE THAN SALEM AND GONZALO). Always open to talk if you’d like to shoot me a PM! Please don’t hesitate to tell me I’m being a jerk or overbearing, I love helpful feedback! Love y’all!
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"Meddle not in the affairs of dragons, for thou art crunchy and taste good with ketchup."
Characters for Tenebris Sine Fine
RoughCoronet's Greater Wills
Oh dear. Are you alright Coro?
Yo, I'm Himy (He/him) not as active as I use to be, but I'm here from time to time. I don't got much else to say.
"From the stars of the inner sea, from the tower of insight, from the four corners of paradise, let them know; their story is filled with blessings. Only those free of sin may pass... Garden of Avalon!”
”The elements coalesce, amalgamate, and bring forth the star that interweaves all creation. Bow down with death! Enuma Elish!”
Coro?
My titles are the great Silver Dragon Lord of the Sky, Second in Command of the Dragon Cult, High Warlock of Cynophobia, High Cultist of Jeff, The Lightning Mage. I’m a ✨Chronically online teenage boy✨, and one of the most active posters on the forums (MORE THAN SALEM AND GONZALO). Always open to talk if you’d like to shoot me a PM! Please don’t hesitate to tell me I’m being a jerk or overbearing, I love helpful feedback! Love y’all!
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Felt like screaming and remembered I could change the font size. :D
"Meddle not in the affairs of dragons, for thou art crunchy and taste good with ketchup."
Characters for Tenebris Sine Fine
RoughCoronet's Greater Wills
Yay
My titles are the great Silver Dragon Lord of the Sky, Second in Command of the Dragon Cult, High Warlock of Cynophobia, High Cultist of Jeff, The Lightning Mage. I’m a ✨Chronically online teenage boy✨, and one of the most active posters on the forums (MORE THAN SALEM AND GONZALO). Always open to talk if you’d like to shoot me a PM! Please don’t hesitate to tell me I’m being a jerk or overbearing, I love helpful feedback! Love y’all!
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Bro I started watching house hunters and these people are crazy
"I want a square house with perfect square rooms and blah blah blah"
Or
"I want a millennial colonial New age modernistic retro refurbished antique ranch style farmhouse"
Like if it was me I'd just pick a house that I could stand. And of course it's SO fake just blah
So why can't I stop watching it ahhhhh
I'm just a gay lil' Hedgehog
I hate having characters I want to rp but no place I can really place them into to be able to rp.
"Meddle not in the affairs of dragons, for thou art crunchy and taste good with ketchup."
Characters for Tenebris Sine Fine
RoughCoronet's Greater Wills
AHHH same
i have so many characters but nowhere to use them
Most of them are from the Universal Smorgasbord thread. There just isn’t another thread to really rp gods in.
"Meddle not in the affairs of dragons, for thou art crunchy and taste good with ketchup."
Characters for Tenebris Sine Fine
RoughCoronet's Greater Wills
I feel the same way too
I could theoretically fit certain characters into different places, but that'd be dividing my focus a lot.
Former Spider Queen of the Spider Guild, and friendly neighborhood scheming creature.
"Made by spiders, for spiders, of spiders."
My pronouns are she/her.
Web Weaver of Everlasting Narrative! (title bestowed by Drummer)
Me tooooooo. I wish there were more taverns.
My titles are the great Silver Dragon Lord of the Sky, Second in Command of the Dragon Cult, High Warlock of Cynophobia, High Cultist of Jeff, The Lightning Mage. I’m a ✨Chronically online teenage boy✨, and one of the most active posters on the forums (MORE THAN SALEM AND GONZALO). Always open to talk if you’d like to shoot me a PM! Please don’t hesitate to tell me I’m being a jerk or overbearing, I love helpful feedback! Love y’all!
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I kind of want to make a new, more blanket fantasy tavern, but I'm running low on inspiration right now.
Let him who is without sin cast the first stone.
May each word that I speak be backed by each of my teeth.
Inspiration is hard. :(. I have a tavern ready to release, kind of a city fantasy tavern, but I’m not sure if people will be interested in it or not.
My titles are the great Silver Dragon Lord of the Sky, Second in Command of the Dragon Cult, High Warlock of Cynophobia, High Cultist of Jeff, The Lightning Mage. I’m a ✨Chronically online teenage boy✨, and one of the most active posters on the forums (MORE THAN SALEM AND GONZALO). Always open to talk if you’d like to shoot me a PM! Please don’t hesitate to tell me I’m being a jerk or overbearing, I love helpful feedback! Love y’all!
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I'm sorry it's taking a while to find inspiration. Hope you find the idea soon. :)
Former Spider Queen of the Spider Guild, and friendly neighborhood scheming creature.
"Made by spiders, for spiders, of spiders."
My pronouns are she/her.
Web Weaver of Everlasting Narrative! (title bestowed by Drummer)
Thank you, Yvonne.
I've been trying to make a character for Dungeon of the Mad Mage lately, and so far I have found no success. It's a family game, so I need to make sure things aren't too gory or spooky, and I also have to fit in with Forgotten Realms lore, which I pretty much never studied because I'm genuinely not interested.
Let him who is without sin cast the first stone.
May each word that I speak be backed by each of my teeth.