Hi, I am new to this world, and, I have just wrote my first character background. wondered what you think about it and if you have any idee for an improvment if it needs. My character is a variant of the Kalashar, were insted of sharing body with a Quori, it is sharing body with the soul of aa evil wizard. I would love to know if you have any ideas for potentially changing the stats and abilities for the kalashar to match better with the different soul kombind with the human.  any way here is the backstory. sorry for typingmistakes if I have, engilsh is not my first language. 

Pre story
I live here, in a small village in the woods, were all the people know each other, and everything thing is good. Except for one thing, The evil wizard. He creates chaos, he lives in an old Tower in the woods over the river. The evil Forest, as we call it.

In the village we have our own great wizard, his not as powerful, but since he settled down here, there has been quieter. The wizard’s name is Uviar, and he is so cool and my mentor. Yep, he is teaching me how to become a wizard. One day I be just like him. So far, he has refused to teach me any damage spell, I only learned spells I needed, or the village needed at the moment.

I learned to deal with animals magically, when a lot of crows ate
Our crops, we agreed to share. Another time the evil wizard had poised the river water, so I learned a spell to purify the water. But tomorrow is special, because tomorrow he will hold a ceremony where he Officially declared me his apprentice. And I am so excited. But I got to go now, the story begins, and I must meet some friends.


Story
Not far from the town, Wizard tower layer, where a powerful evil wizard obsessed with Eternal life lives. (Because he was old and drying)
The wizard discovered the way to eternal life, (how to become a lich) but too late, he did not have time to create a Phylactery for himself. So, he had no other choice than to combine his soul with the first Human he found., to buy him more time. So, he could create the Phylactery he needed. He started the process and separated his soul from his body and fly towards the town in search of a victim.


Me and my little brother and some friends was out playing hide and find in the forest late at night. When it was my turn to find, everything changed.

When I walked around. Without stopping I ran and just managed to push my little brother Away from the skull, but in the process, I was hit instead, and everything went Black.

Lucky I had the good with me, I don't know exactly how it happened, but I believe thanks  the good in me by saving my brother, the Evil combined with me, could not grow control over me, as he intended. Leaving me in the Control, and he in my subconscious. (The wizard's soul is the replacement for the quori)


I woke up, laying on the ground where I was hit, its much Brighter outside, so it is clearly morning. I hear footsteps and people talking in the distance, they were coming closer and closer, and son I could see how they are. They were my parents; my little brother must have gotten them to help me. They helped me up om my feet and got me safely back to town. On the way home I told my parents everything I had experienced.

Once we reached the entrance to the village, our great wizard Uviar met us. Again, I told what happened that night. But he did not seem as relieved as my parents was. He looked at me and said some words in draconic. Now I have never studied or knew Anny draconic before, but I understood exactly what he said. But it was like I heard it twice, first the Uviar said it in draconic, then it was like I heard the same words in common but coming from Inside me. I decided to keep this to me, for now.

I saw Uviar's eyes wide open, and they got increasingly angry looking, still not taking his eyes of me. What happened next, I could still give eats upon me today. It all started right after Uviar said this "He did it"

Then Uviar started casting a spell again, this time I did not need to understand what he said to knew what he was doing. His cane started glowing red, and a fireball manifested above the cane. And he said "I am sorry" right before he threw the fireball towards me.

The next events happened so fast, my father had jump in front of me, and protected me from the fire ball. My brother started crying, my mother tried to comfort my brother, at the same time she looked at me with tears in her eyes and said " run "

I looked down on my father, which is now not more than a Burn skeleton. I could feel a tear coming down my chin. I wanted to stay, stay with my father, and comfort my brother and mother, but I knew I could not. I could already feel the heat of another fireball being created, so I ran. I ran as fast as I could, and I could hear Uviar scream

"I had no choice, there an evil inside you, it must be purged" followed by the screams of my mother and my little brother.

I don't know if it was random, destined or something within pulling me in specific direction, but when I stopped running, I ended up in front of the Evil wizard Tower. I had only heard about this place in scary stories my dad used to tell, and the nightmares I had following that. But one thing is for sure, this place is much creepier in the real world.
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The door was open, it was like I was supposed to go inside, I did not want to, but there was like something inside of me dragged me towards the door. So, I started to walk inside. It was quiet, inside, at one point I wonder if the evil wizard had taken control over me, so that he could use me for what evil experiment he played to. But in that case, it is too late for me, I had already gone inside, and the doors had closed right after I entered.

To my surprise, the wizard did not come, the candles were all lit, so I could easily look around. The room I was inn was full of old scripts and books, laying everywhere. There also was a halfly rolled up rug on the floor, revealing a secret entrance to a basement.

I Begin to climb down the ladder, and the further Down I climb, the worse becomes the smell. It is like the smell of death, but 5 times worse. I think to myself, " what will I find down here? It must be his previous victims, right?" But when I enter the room, I could not believe my eyes.

In the basement there on the middle of the floor lies the great wizard himself dead on the Ground. I wanted to leave, but something kept me down there. It was this feeling that it was something down here, something I had to take with me. It was dark so I did not see much. But I did barely see a weird looking book laying on the ground beside the corpse. So, I took it and climb away from this room.

Now knowing that the wizard living her is dead, I explored the entire Tower more carefully. I found some coins, creepy dagger and a weird looking book with a lock on it, (don't really know why, just got a feeling that I should bring it) put everything in found in s small bag I found upstairs.

The coming night I did not dream, which was unusual, cause I always used to dream. Ye, that night was different, it was like I was relieving a memory, but it was not mine. The memory was terrible. I would call it a nightmare, you know if I would have dreamed it.

I thought back on the weird things that had happened to me, since the accident. I understand draconic, have I did not dream, and I cannot forget the last words Uviar said "you have an evil inside “knowing that weird things are happening to me, I decided to keep to myself. And try to figure out what happened to me that day.

After keeping to myself for years I finally believe I have found the truth. What really happened to me that day years ago. The thing that attacks me, was the soul of an evil spirit or person, I theories, the evil wizard himself. And it did not attack me, but instead merged with me. Knowing the truth of myself, at least enough, I decided that I was ready to start a life with others,

another 5 or 6 month goes bye before I come across a group of druids. It turns out that they were seeking the answer to the Natural order of life. They were heading to a magical mountain search for the answer, but none of them really knew where the mountain was.

After spending the day with them and listening to the project that you had upon them. I slowly realized that I knew a place that fit the description they told me. Once I Said that, I was immediately responded with Happy Word and song, later that day, I Officially become a part of the group.

I am now a proud member of a reach group, but nobody can know my Secret.


After 10 years with who I now can call friends, I decided to take my separate way. I had learned everything I could form them, and during our time together I had meet a lot of new people and visited unfamiliar places. But something happened

It was a normal day for us, w
We woke up ate breakfast together. Then we Split up in groups. This day I was with my close friend in the group and our leader (who also is an exceptionally good friend). We went out and begun searching. But something found us.

when we got attack by a (monster). This had happened many times before, and we had done just fine before. But this time was different. During the attack my close friend, the one who invited me to join them all those years ago, got badly damaged. The leader managed to kill the (monster) but it was too late.

Our third member of our Squad died of the damages right after the (monster) was killed. When I realized that my friend was dead. It broke me, the tears started flooding and I thew myself over my dead friend. I was sad and angry, there I lied and cried over the dead body of my friend. When my leader said something and aimed the bow towards me.

I looked up at him confused, I saw his bow was pointed at me. But he also looked terrified. I had bever seen him that way before. He looked back at me and screamed "what it that thing “. I looked around and saw a big black skull in white flames floating above me. I recognized it immediately; it was the same that attacked me all those years ago. I looked up and while the skull sunk down inside of me.

I decided to tell my leader everything. About my little brother being attacked, me pushing him away, but I got hit instead. I told about the wizard and the true reason I left my village. I do not even have words to describe how he is feeling, but he did drop the bow, and hugged me. He had a lot of questions and I answered them, finally we agreed that it was best for me to go my own way, and leave the Group, and that he will keep my Secret for now.


The next day, decided my friends to arrange a God Bye & God Luck party for me. Our leader must have told the group that I was leaving. During that time, we relived old stories and had fun. Then to my surprise then next on the agenda was gift giving. Or letters, in this case, I got a letter from each so I would remember them. I the letter from the leader was different, when he gave me, he said, "this letter is not to open before you know truly who you are" and that is it. I said my goodbye's and went off into the woods. Ready for a new adventure. But something changed.

I felt it when the skull went inside of me again, it was as it had grown stronger. I could feel it more in my mind. And that night changed me. I woke up, with a headache, it was like my mind did was to bigger, more powerful.

What level is your character at this point in their story?

I dont know if this is a thing, but kind of between lvl 0-1. I tried write it i a way that, all the abilities the normal kalashar brings with its race, gets unlocked during the backgraund, ir most of it comes to him at the and of the story, and but still he has a long way letft.  

That is a looooong backstory for a 1st level character.

I recommend cutting down a bit, afterall, 1st level adventurers are only a step above well-trained soldiers.