there was once a mage who used his magic to bring joy to others and defend what he thought was right. then one day he came upon a city ruled by a cruel wizard king who taxed his subjects into poverty and so the mage sought to oppose the wizard king. but in cruel twist of fate the wizard king had earned the favour of mystra. who at his request sent her champions to defeat the kind mage and so he was stripped of the spark of magic and imprisoned for ages uncountable. during his long imprisonment he had no choice but accept his fate and when he finally did he realised some cosmic truth which imparted him with great power which he now uses in an attempt to replace mystra as god of magic
so i would love to know what you all think about my creation. i would love some advice for this
if i say something inflammatory the intention is not to trigger an emotional response and the fact that it does so is purely accidental and I sincerely apologise if it does
Well, Mystra's a Neutral Good deity, so I'm not exactly sure how a cruel wizard king would get in her good books to the point that she's willing to dispatch her champion on his say-so, particularly since one would expect she'd know if this was someone who deserved a smiting or not. Also, how'd the imprisoned mage live for "ages uncountable" if he'd been stripped of his magic? Honestly, if you're just looking for a "good guy got screwed over and went crazy" character, would be a lot simpler to just have the wizard king have used Imprisonment on him. Or at least shift the higher power the king called on to an evil deity or fiend or something else that would make sense, rather than an NG deity who by rights should be rather opposed to the king.
if i say something inflammatory the intention is not to trigger an emotional response and the fact that it does so is purely accidental and I sincerely apologise if it does
i have thought deeply on the subject and thought maybe you all could assist in the expansion of this idea
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if i say something inflammatory the intention is not to trigger an emotional response and the fact that it does so is purely accidental and I sincerely apologise if it does
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there was once a mage who used his magic to bring joy to others and defend what he thought was right. then one day he came upon a city ruled by a cruel wizard king who taxed his subjects into poverty and so the mage sought to oppose the wizard king. but in cruel twist of fate the wizard king had earned the favour of mystra. who at his request sent her champions to defeat the kind mage and so he was stripped of the spark of magic and imprisoned for ages uncountable. during his long imprisonment he had no choice but accept his fate and when he finally did he realised some cosmic truth which imparted him with great power which he now uses in an attempt to replace mystra as god of magic
so i would love to know what you all think about my creation. i would love some advice for this
if i say something inflammatory the intention is not to trigger an emotional response and the fact that it does so is purely accidental and I sincerely apologise if it does
Well, Mystra's a Neutral Good deity, so I'm not exactly sure how a cruel wizard king would get in her good books to the point that she's willing to dispatch her champion on his say-so, particularly since one would expect she'd know if this was someone who deserved a smiting or not. Also, how'd the imprisoned mage live for "ages uncountable" if he'd been stripped of his magic? Honestly, if you're just looking for a "good guy got screwed over and went crazy" character, would be a lot simpler to just have the wizard king have used Imprisonment on him. Or at least shift the higher power the king called on to an evil deity or fiend or something else that would make sense, rather than an NG deity who by rights should be rather opposed to the king.
in the lore mystra has been shown to support evil characters such as darghathoth because of they have invented new spells and magic
my intention was the wizard king cursed him with immortality i just articulated that point poorly
if i say something inflammatory the intention is not to trigger an emotional response and the fact that it does so is purely accidental and I sincerely apologise if it does
Sounds like a campaign itching for a heroic Gnome Mage Hunter Monk
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thank you all for your advice
i have thought deeply on the subject and thought maybe you all could assist in the expansion of this idea
if i say something inflammatory the intention is not to trigger an emotional response and the fact that it does so is purely accidental and I sincerely apologise if it does