This is my thread so that I can receive feedback on my provided homebrew creations.
The most recent one I want feedback on is my Forsaken race here is the most recent comment on it.
Here is the most recent version of the Forsaken race, with as much feedback as possible incorporated, I would love to receive feedback on this to see if I can further improve it in anyway.
These three are all I wish to receive feedback on so far... Any new homebrew I post wanting feedback for in the future will be at the end of the thread starting from page 3 on, ignore all pages before that in terms of feedback for me, your more than welcome to comment on any comments in the pages anyway though, I just won't respond to any feedback unless I change my mind and say as such.
Thanks for the assistance!
I hope you find these enjoyable if you ever add them to your own homebrew collection!
IMPORTANT UPDATE:(Please read all the way to the end if you read this, it is all important so don't skim through if you read it.) Just to let anyone who is waiting on me to release some new homebrew to receive feedback on, I won't have any released for quite a long time. This is not a certain statement, but it is extremely expected. The reasons for this in short, is because I am going through a time of severe-ish depression and one of the many side affects is that no matter how into an idea I am, I find it really hard to find the motivation to go through with it. To summarise, to all who are waiting expectantly, if anyone, please don't expect much for a while and treat any release as a rare occurrence. Many people probably don't care to much about this thread, I just want to let any who do, know, so they aren't being left out and disappointed for no apparent reason. Basically I don't like keeping people uniformed. Despite all this, I would still like any feedback, I just might not act on it or respond every time immediately... Thanks for reading... that's all for now.
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
I'm going to use this post for status updates from now on... Speaking of which... STATUS UPDATE!!!: I am currently in the process of making a new homebrew weapon named Oracle, it is going to be a sentient weapon with (hence the name) prophetic powers and such. Basically the point of this update is... this is my first time making a weapon who is sentient so I would really appreciate some help with making her (yes I've given the dagger named Oracle a gender, mainly because it's based off a greek myth I've heard of where the spirit of a trojan princess possessed her mirror when she died and gained the power to show people the future through the mirror, so yeah, this is similar lmao. That isn't weird right?)
But yeah anyway I'll post the details I have so far in the next post down from this soon.
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
Rarity: Artifact (Would that make sense? I remember people telling me off about making my magic weapons artifact when they aren't that powerful to fit that level, does this fit that level?)
Weapon type: Dagger
Requires attunement: No
Description:
This ornate dagger is sentient and can tell the future.
Oracle is of true neutral alignment, but when she forms a bond with someone she tends to become their alignment. Oracle has the following stats: STR (11) DEX (15) CON (15) WIS (18) INT (18) CHA (18) Oracle can read, write and speak both common and primordial, as well as up to two languages that someone she meets knows provided she spend at least 1 day getting to know them. To write she must have some access to a liquid substance with which she can write words, then she uses her point as a pen point. She can also carve characters onto surfaces.
Oracle has access to the following spells: PlaceHolder() PlaceHolder() PlaceHolder() PlaceHolder()
Please tell me if there is anything I should remove, change or add. Thanks!
Also should I do some YouTube vids of me doing this so that people can follow along with my plans better? I do have a channel named Devin DeRiche that I could do it on...
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
I hope people find these inspirational, or even a subject of a laughing stock if they are that bad, which they very well might be.
Nonetheless I would love feedback!
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"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
Actually let me reiterate what I mean by feedback, I don't care if you think what you want to say about it is nasty as long as you think it is reasonable feedback that I could benefit from, I want to hear it, now if you are purposely trying to be cruel or something, go to a trash talking forum cause I don't want to hear it thanks.
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"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
Could still be crap though lol, haven't tested it in the builder yet...
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"Know your enemy, know your self" Click here to read my Homebrew thread! "Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update: I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
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This is my thread so that I can receive feedback on my provided homebrew creations.
The most recent one I want feedback on is my Forsaken race here is the most recent comment on it.
Here is the most recent version of the Forsaken race, with as much feedback as possible incorporated, I would love to receive feedback on this to see if I can further improve it in anyway.
https://www.dndbeyond.com/races/1114007-forsaken
As well as that I would also like feedback on these:
https://www.dndbeyond.com/magic-items/4961403-darces-ring-of-shadows
https://www.dndbeyond.com/races/1005608-shayde
These three are all I wish to receive feedback on so far... Any new homebrew I post wanting feedback for in the future will be at the end of the thread starting from page 3 on, ignore all pages before that in terms of feedback for me, your more than welcome to comment on any comments in the pages anyway though, I just won't respond to any feedback unless I change my mind and say as such.
Thanks for the assistance!
I hope you find these enjoyable if you ever add them to your own homebrew collection!
IMPORTANT UPDATE: (Please read all the way to the end if you read this, it is all important so don't skim through if you read it.)
Just to let anyone who is waiting on me to release some new homebrew to receive feedback on, I won't have any released for quite a long time. This is not a certain statement, but it is extremely expected. The reasons for this in short, is because I am going through a time of severe-ish depression and one of the many side affects is that no matter how into an idea I am, I find it really hard to find the motivation to go through with it.
To summarise, to all who are waiting expectantly, if anyone, please don't expect much for a while and treat any release as a rare occurrence. Many people probably don't care to much about this thread, I just want to let any who do, know, so they aren't being left out and disappointed for no apparent reason. Basically I don't like keeping people uniformed. Despite all this, I would still like any feedback, I just might not act on it or respond every time immediately... Thanks for reading... that's all for now.
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
I'm going to use this post for status updates from now on... Speaking of which...
STATUS UPDATE!!!:
I am currently in the process of making a new homebrew weapon named Oracle, it is going to be a sentient weapon with (hence the name) prophetic powers and such.
Basically the point of this update is... this is my first time making a weapon who is sentient so I would really appreciate some help with making her (yes I've given the dagger named Oracle a gender, mainly because it's based off a greek myth I've heard of where the spirit of a trojan princess possessed her mirror when she died and gained the power to show people the future through the mirror, so yeah, this is similar lmao. That isn't weird right?)
But yeah anyway I'll post the details I have so far in the next post down from this soon.
Regards:
Aldyn, AKA, Devin DeRiche
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
Name:
Oracle
Version:
1
Rarity:
Artifact (Would that make sense? I remember people telling me off about making my magic weapons artifact when they aren't that powerful to fit that level, does this fit that level?)
Weapon type:
Dagger
Requires attunement:
No
Description:
This ornate dagger is sentient and can tell the future.
Oracle is of true neutral alignment, but when she forms a bond with someone she tends to become their alignment.
Oracle has the following stats:
STR (11) DEX (15) CON (15) WIS (18) INT (18) CHA (18)
Oracle can read, write and speak both common and primordial, as well as up to two languages that someone she meets knows provided she spend at least 1 day getting to know them. To write she must have some access to a liquid substance with which she can write words, then she uses her point as a pen point. She can also carve characters onto surfaces.
Oracle has access to the following spells:
PlaceHolder()
PlaceHolder()
PlaceHolder()
PlaceHolder()
Please tell me if there is anything I should remove, change or add.
Thanks!
Also should I do some YouTube vids of me doing this so that people can follow along with my plans better? I do have a channel named Devin DeRiche that I could do it on...
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
https://www.dndbeyond.com/magic-items/3288655-amulet-of-aldyn
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
https://www.dndbeyond.com/magic-items/3288289-armour-of-aldyn
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
https://www.dndbeyond.com/magic-items/3288543-blade-or-the-red-dragon-emperor
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
https://www.dndbeyond.com/races/1042573-canus
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
https://www.dndbeyond.com/magic-items/3346570-cursed-dragon-mask
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
https://www.dndbeyond.com/magic-items/4961403-darces-ring-of-shadows
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
https://www.dndbeyond.com/subraces/589548-forsaken-one
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
https://www.dndbeyond.com/magic-items/3288587-gauntlet-of-the-red-dragon-emperor
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
This one is more mild
or terrible
https://www.dndbeyond.com/magic-items/3287613-hellstorm-staff
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
https://www.dndbeyond.com/races/1044620-kitsune
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
https://www.dndbeyond.com/races/1005608-shayde
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
This one looks garbage on the description, but it really is kind of op lol
https://www.dndbeyond.com/magic-items/3288177-wrath-of-aldyn
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
I hope people find these inspirational, or even a subject of a laughing stock if they are that bad, which they very well might be.
Nonetheless I would love feedback!
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
Please...
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
Actually let me reiterate what I mean by feedback, I don't care if you think what you want to say about it is nasty as long as you think it is reasonable feedback that I could benefit from, I want to hear it, now if you are purposely trying to be cruel or something, go to a trash talking forum cause I don't want to hear it thanks.
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
Finally!
I think I finally made a good looking one with nice tidy details page appearance and good powers and such.
I really want feedback on this one people!
https://www.dndbeyond.com/races/1109877-forsaken
ENJOY!!!
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^
Could still be crap though lol, haven't tested it in the builder yet...
"Know your enemy, know your self"
Click here to read my Homebrew thread!
"Veni, vidi, vici...
Status update:
I am going to be afk very frequently for a currently un predictable amount of time, for more information/details on this, check my homebrew thread which can be found easier by clicking the 'here' above ^^^