So, I need some feedback on this homebrew monster that I made because I don't know if it's either too strong/ too weak. The people who take time to voice their concerns and opinions you have my thanks! Click here for the monster.
I see a lot of common beginner monster brewer mistakes. I'll start at the top.
I feel like its size should be tiny. How big is It?
AC is not natural armor if it is just 10+DEX.
HP has the wrong average, and doesn't include CON modifier.
Speed does not specify a fly speed. Based on the creature's description and features, I assume it should have a 0 walk speed and 60 fly speed. The "wings invisible" part can be in description, it doesn't need to be here.
Passive perception doesn't match perception. With a -4 WIS, its passive perception should be 6.
Its Attacks have the wrong average and don't include a correct ability modifier. And attack range should be 5 feet because squares.
Toxic bite should mention a poisoned duration or repeating the save.
I wanted to talk about serpent flight and serpent call separately.
For serpent flight, I'm not sure what your intention behind this feature is. Does the fly die if it touches the ground? If it stops flying? Does it sleep? And why?
Serpent call does not mention what the roll DC is. I also think this should be an action with a recharge instead of being a reaction with a timer. But if a DM wants more flies, they can just add more flies.
I agree with what Dx said. I think I get the intention behind Serpent Flight. It's like if we hit a normal fly with a fly swatter, I think? With Serpent Call, I'd read up on sword wraith commander (if you have Mordenkainen's Tome of Foes). They have a similar action they can do that has a charge and reset condition. It's once per day.
I would add swarm tactics to the fly if you're going to keep the ability for the fly to call others to it. (Look at swarm of insects or swarm of rats for ideas on that.)
IMO the strength and charisma scores are too high. I'm looking at the swarm of insects stat block in the PHB and those stats are so low for those guys. The only things high on the swarm of insects is DEX and CON (higher CON because swarm and not a single insect).
So, I need some feedback on this homebrew monster that I made because I don't know if it's either too strong/ too weak. The people who take time to voice their concerns and opinions you have my thanks!
Click here for the monster.
You must gather your party before venturing forth!
I see a lot of common beginner monster brewer mistakes. I'll start at the top.
I wanted to talk about serpent flight and serpent call separately.
I agree with what Dx said. I think I get the intention behind Serpent Flight. It's like if we hit a normal fly with a fly swatter, I think? With Serpent Call, I'd read up on sword wraith commander (if you have Mordenkainen's Tome of Foes). They have a similar action they can do that has a charge and reset condition. It's once per day.
I would add swarm tactics to the fly if you're going to keep the ability for the fly to call others to it. (Look at swarm of insects or swarm of rats for ideas on that.)
IMO the strength and charisma scores are too high. I'm looking at the swarm of insects stat block in the PHB and those stats are so low for those guys. The only things high on the swarm of insects is DEX and CON (higher CON because swarm and not a single insect).
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