I have written a very simple back story, and I would like to get your thoughts on it.
One thing you will notice, is that Alan writes about himself and his past in the third person: disassociation, perhaps?.
The Story of Alan Farrow - (Modern English version)
Alan, the son of Roger and Elisabeth Farrow, was raised on a pig farm with affectionate parents and his two younger sisters, Rachel and Rosemary. That was until he engaged in a dispute with the son of the village Alderman over a card game. In a drunken rage, he fatally beat the young boy with a barstool. Alan was apprehended by the town guard that very night and incarcerated in the village jaile. Notification was sent to the Reeve, informing them of the crime and establishing the conditions of the ordeal to prove Alan’s guilt. He was to grasp an iron bar heated in holy fire until it glowed white and endure the time it took for sand to pass through an hourglass. Should he hold the white-hot iron bar until the sand ran out, he would be deemed innocent; dropping it would signify guilt and a sentence of hanging.
In an astonishing display of almost superhuman endurance, before the Reeve, the Alderman, and the assembled crowd, Alan achieved the impossible. He clutched the white-hot iron bar aloft without a whimper until the final grain of sand had passed.
Alan was proven innocent.
This verdict did not satisfy the Alderman. He could not allow Alan to go unpunished. Over the following months, he used his connections and position to spread rumours that Alan was a witch, accusing him of using foul demonic magic to escape rightful punishment. Alan and his family attempted to refute these claims, and initially, most of the village supported them. Yet, one by one, the Alderman won them over, either through persistence, bribery, or threats. By the year's end, the weight of suspicion forced Alan from his home and the life he had known, transforming him into a vagabond and eventual jobbing mercenary.
This turn of events led him to join a disparate group of adventurers, embarking on a journey that, for better or worse, would alter his life forever.
So,
As you can see, I have wrtten a very simple backsory for Alan Farrow, what do you all think it it?
I'd love to hear your thoughts on how it can be improved.
It’s simple yes BUT that’s not always a bad thing. You have a interesting Salem witch trials-ish backstory that is concise and gives room for changes to it depending upon where you want your character to go and what you want them to be. But maybe the alder could actually be a witch and used magic to convince the other townspeople to exile Alan and you could something with that. But other than expansion in my opinion it’s a solid backstory.
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Hi,
I have written a very simple back story, and I would like to get your thoughts on it.
One thing you will notice, is that Alan writes about himself and his past in the third person: disassociation, perhaps?.
So,
As you can see, I have wrtten a very simple backsory for Alan Farrow, what do you all think it it?
I'd love to hear your thoughts on how it can be improved.
XD
A caffeinated nerd who has played TTRPGs or a number of years and is very much a fantasy adventure geek.
It’s simple yes BUT that’s not always a bad thing. You have a interesting Salem witch trials-ish backstory that is concise and gives room for changes to it depending upon where you want your character to go and what you want them to be. But maybe the alder could actually be a witch and used magic to convince the other townspeople to exile Alan and you could something with that. But other than expansion in my opinion it’s a solid backstory.