Hey, writers, i need some help. I wrote part of a scene and I need help continuing it, I'm shot for ideas
You have summoned me!
okay, Here is the paragraph. For context, I had a continuation written, but it was too nggggghhhidon'tknowbad. I want the Character described, Lillian, to end up taking the POV character, Marina, to her dorm (this is not weird as 1, the dorm is shared, 2, Marina is now lillian's problem, and 3, she ends up sharing he dorm too)
Fifteen minutes of deafening almost-silence later, the girl in green emerged from the office, and marina got her first proper look at a normal academy student. Though, for this girl,“normal” was a bit of a stretch, even though Marina’s metric of normal might have been skewed. Her jet-black hair was only half-tied up, the rest of it barely brushing her shoulders. For the most part, she had olive skin, but there was a purplish-red splotch under her left eye, too red to be a bruise but to purple to be blush. And her eyes; there was nothing unusual about their greenish brownish color, but they kept squinting and sweeping from side to side, as if looking for a threat that wasn’t there. Her sweater had seven black buttons, but it must have once have eight because one of the buttonholes was empty.
Cut bit
The girl grabbed marina’s shoulders and pressed her against the wall, her touch sending jagged waves down marina’s spine.
“I need you to listen carefully to what I’m about to say.” she insisted. “You are not supposed to be here, and nobody is supposed to know that. The headmistress just finished giving me an earful, and she made you my problem. Follow me, quickly.”
Marina did as she was told and followed the girl through the decorated hallways. Everything she did seemed meticulously planned, from how she turned corners to the rhythm of her footsteps. All of a sudden she ducked into a room, pulling marina with her into the pitch-black. As the girl fumbled around in the darkness looking for who knows what, Marina finally found the right words to say.
“Slow Down!” she shouted, far too loud than she had meant to be. The mumbling and shuffling stopped, replaced by the rattle of a curtain rod as the girl flung the drapes open, drenching the room in light.
Compared to the rest of the academy, the room was small, but Marina wouldn’t have described it that way. Most of the room was carefully decorated with blue, silver, and dark wood, but one corner looked as if a set of oil paints had exploded. That corner was home to a good-sized iron cauldron and shelves stocked full of bottles, jars, and dog-eared journals.
my idea was to have everything move very fast but choppily because the pov character is in a fish-out-of-water situation but it's not good
I'm fry, and I make doodles. That's why they call me FRY DOODLES. Also no pressure but check out my YouTube channel (Fry Doodles) I'm a disabled, neurodivergent, artsy dumpster fire who's always open to chat or share a fun fact or two. I’m ace I'm a sensitive little sad bean. But, I'm also god's favorite princess and the most interesting girl in the world. Crafter of Constellations, vocaloid enjoyer, waluigi’s #1 fan, space alien, and certified silly goose
*Suddenly appears in the room looking drowsy and with a severe case of bedhead* 'Sup?
Well. Hello there. I may be an incredibly useless dm.
Don't say that. What happened?
My players got off track and I couldn’t get them back, plus they didn’t even get character sheets done. We were there for four hours.
That's okay. It doesn't mean you're an ineffective DM, you just need more practice. I'm sure your players think you're fine.
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Hi there! My name's Elk. I'm NoiSilverheart's doppelgänger. I'm a demiromantic, socially awkward Okie who may or may not be a pyromaniac. *random confetti blast*
I'm a warlock of the ArchCrone, my patron is TheFriendlyArchfey. Was Nicknamed AchatesCervus8337 by VitusW. Given the titles "Swashbuckling Scorcher", "The Unpredictable Jedi", "Burning Fury of the Ancients", and "Combustion Knight" by DrummerBoyDragonSlayer.
I believe the sole reason that Wednesday season two is taking so long is they are searching for the perfect episode titles with the word, ‘woe,’ in them.
WTH are they called slime molds? They are neither slime nor mold
My mind has been blown, my eyes opened.
What's up?
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A young storyteller who wanders the lands of lore, weaving a tale at every request. Has a lot of Cramorants. Major twenty one pilots fan. Certified Joker. Writer of Very Fishy Diaries and huge Lemony Snicket fan. He/him. A Warrior of Words, Vindicator of Vocabulary, Paladin of Poetry, and a Lancer of Language.
WTH are they called slime molds? They are neither slime nor mold
My mind has been blown, my eyes opened.
What's up?
Ello! nothing much, you?
Sorry, had to leave.
Writing my book and drinking some tea.
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A young storyteller who wanders the lands of lore, weaving a tale at every request. Has a lot of Cramorants. Major twenty one pilots fan. Certified Joker. Writer of Very Fishy Diaries and huge Lemony Snicket fan. He/him. A Warrior of Words, Vindicator of Vocabulary, Paladin of Poetry, and a Lancer of Language.
WTH are they called slime molds? They are neither slime nor mold
My mind has been blown, my eyes opened.
What's up?
Ello! nothing much, you?
Sorry, had to leave.
Writing my book and drinking some tea.
Oh, that's neat. May I ask what the book is about?
Basically there is an evil king named Rayn who bound his soul to his body so he is now immortal, and they overheard vital information. Also, the main character is the Cursed Messiah, meaning he is cursed with many burdens, but also hosen to defeat Rayn. I wrote the first version last year, but it sucked, so I restarted this year, and now am in the editing phase. Imma try to get it published one day.
Rayn is actually possessed by an ancient being named Colsez, who got corrupted by an ancient-er being named Kridth, the Father of all Evil. He is gonna suck Colsez out of Rayn into himself, and then his girlfriend, another blessed and cursed person, is gonna kill him, so Colsez dies inside of him.
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A young storyteller who wanders the lands of lore, weaving a tale at every request. Has a lot of Cramorants. Major twenty one pilots fan. Certified Joker. Writer of Very Fishy Diaries and huge Lemony Snicket fan. He/him. A Warrior of Words, Vindicator of Vocabulary, Paladin of Poetry, and a Lancer of Language.
WTH are they called slime molds? They are neither slime nor mold
My mind has been blown, my eyes opened.
What's up?
Ello! nothing much, you?
Sorry, had to leave.
Writing my book and drinking some tea.
Oh, that's neat. May I ask what the book is about?
Basically there is an evil king named Rayn who bound his soul to his body so he is now immortal, and they overheard vital information. Also, the main character is the Cursed Messiah, meaning he is cursed with many burdens, but also hosen to defeat Rayn. I wrote the first version last year, but it sucked, so I restarted this year, and now am in the editing phase. Imma try to get it published one day.
Rayn is actually possessed by an ancient being named Colsez, who got corrupted by an ancient-er being named Kridth, the Father of all Evil. He is gonna suck Colsez out of Rayn into himself, and then his girlfriend, another blessed and cursed person, is gonna kill him, so Colsez dies inside of him.
That's pretty epic. If ya ever publish it, I can't wait to read it!
WTH are they called slime molds? They are neither slime nor mold
My mind has been blown, my eyes opened.
What's up?
Ello! nothing much, you?
Sorry, had to leave.
Writing my book and drinking some tea.
Oh, that's neat. May I ask what the book is about?
Basically there is an evil king named Rayn who bound his soul to his body so he is now immortal, and they overheard vital information. Also, the main character is the Cursed Messiah, meaning he is cursed with many burdens, but also hosen to defeat Rayn. I wrote the first version last year, but it sucked, so I restarted this year, and now am in the editing phase. Imma try to get it published one day.
Rayn is actually possessed by an ancient being named Colsez, who got corrupted by an ancient-er being named Kridth, the Father of all Evil. He is gonna suck Colsez out of Rayn into himself, and then his girlfriend, another blessed and cursed person, is gonna kill him, so Colsez dies inside of him.
That's pretty epic. If ya ever publish it, I can't wait to read it!
Thanks :) I'm gonna try to make it into four books, cause there's a lot that I have planned out. It is called Journey: Rise of the Soul Bound.
Have you ever written anything like that/completely unrelated?
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A young storyteller who wanders the lands of lore, weaving a tale at every request. Has a lot of Cramorants. Major twenty one pilots fan. Certified Joker. Writer of Very Fishy Diaries and huge Lemony Snicket fan. He/him. A Warrior of Words, Vindicator of Vocabulary, Paladin of Poetry, and a Lancer of Language.
WTH are they called slime molds? They are neither slime nor mold
My mind has been blown, my eyes opened.
What's up?
Ello! nothing much, you?
Sorry, had to leave.
Writing my book and drinking some tea.
Oh, that's neat. May I ask what the book is about?
Basically there is an evil king named Rayn who bound his soul to his body so he is now immortal, and they overheard vital information. Also, the main character is the Cursed Messiah, meaning he is cursed with many burdens, but also hosen to defeat Rayn. I wrote the first version last year, but it sucked, so I restarted this year, and now am in the editing phase. Imma try to get it published one day.
Rayn is actually possessed by an ancient being named Colsez, who got corrupted by an ancient-er being named Kridth, the Father of all Evil. He is gonna suck Colsez out of Rayn into himself, and then his girlfriend, another blessed and cursed person, is gonna kill him, so Colsez dies inside of him.
That's pretty epic. If ya ever publish it, I can't wait to read it!
Thanks :) I'm gonna try to make it into four books, cause there's a lot that I have planned out. It is called Journey: Rise of the Soul Bound.
Have you ever written anything like that/completely unrelated?
Yeah kinda. Basically a bestiary with lore is the biggest thing I wrote
WTH are they called slime molds? They are neither slime nor mold
My mind has been blown, my eyes opened.
What's up?
Ello! nothing much, you?
Sorry, had to leave.
Writing my book and drinking some tea.
Oh, that's neat. May I ask what the book is about?
Basically there is an evil king named Rayn who bound his soul to his body so he is now immortal, and they overheard vital information. Also, the main character is the Cursed Messiah, meaning he is cursed with many burdens, but also hosen to defeat Rayn. I wrote the first version last year, but it sucked, so I restarted this year, and now am in the editing phase. Imma try to get it published one day.
Rayn is actually possessed by an ancient being named Colsez, who got corrupted by an ancient-er being named Kridth, the Father of all Evil. He is gonna suck Colsez out of Rayn into himself, and then his girlfriend, another blessed and cursed person, is gonna kill him, so Colsez dies inside of him.
That's pretty epic. If ya ever publish it, I can't wait to read it!
Thanks :) I'm gonna try to make it into four books, cause there's a lot that I have planned out. It is called Journey: Rise of the Soul Bound.
Have you ever written anything like that/completely unrelated?
Yeah kinda. Basically a bestiary with lore is the biggest thing I wrote
Nice! I've written a few of those, all of them started projects but never finished.
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A young storyteller who wanders the lands of lore, weaving a tale at every request. Has a lot of Cramorants. Major twenty one pilots fan. Certified Joker. Writer of Very Fishy Diaries and huge Lemony Snicket fan. He/him. A Warrior of Words, Vindicator of Vocabulary, Paladin of Poetry, and a Lancer of Language.
The great Silver Dragon Lord of the Sky, Second in Command of the Dragon Cult, Warlock of Cyno, and Cultist of Jeff. I have a lot of allegiances… I use He/They pronouns and you can usually find me on the Camp Half-Blood thread in Adohands Kitchen.
My players got off track and I couldn’t get them back, plus they didn’t even get character sheets done. We were there for four hours.
Yelo! I’m Selia or Sel or some variation on that. Pronouns? Just not she/her, please.
I’m an artist and a nerd. I’ll draw stuff for y’all purely because I have nothing better to do.
Is art
okay, Here is the paragraph. For context, I had a continuation written, but it was too nggggghhhidon'tknowbad. I want the Character described, Lillian, to end up taking the POV character, Marina, to her dorm (this is not weird as 1, the dorm is shared, 2, Marina is now lillian's problem, and 3, she ends up sharing he dorm too)
Fifteen minutes of deafening almost-silence later, the girl in green emerged from the office, and marina got her first proper look at a normal academy student. Though, for this girl,“normal” was a bit of a stretch, even though Marina’s metric of normal might have been skewed. Her jet-black hair was only half-tied up, the rest of it barely brushing her shoulders. For the most part, she had olive skin, but there was a purplish-red splotch under her left eye, too red to be a bruise but to purple to be blush. And her eyes; there was nothing unusual about their greenish brownish color, but they kept squinting and sweeping from side to side, as if looking for a threat that wasn’t there. Her sweater had seven black buttons, but it must have once have eight because one of the buttonholes was empty.
Cut bit
The girl grabbed marina’s shoulders and pressed her against the wall, her touch sending jagged waves down marina’s spine.
“I need you to listen carefully to what I’m about to say.” she insisted. “You are not supposed to be here, and nobody is supposed to know that. The headmistress just finished giving me an earful, and she made you my problem. Follow me, quickly.”
Marina did as she was told and followed the girl through the decorated hallways. Everything she did seemed meticulously planned, from how she turned corners to the rhythm of her footsteps. All of a sudden she ducked into a room, pulling marina with her into the pitch-black. As the girl fumbled around in the darkness looking for who knows what, Marina finally found the right words to say.
“Slow Down!” she shouted, far too loud than she had meant to be. The mumbling and shuffling stopped, replaced by the rattle of a curtain rod as the girl flung the drapes open, drenching the room in light.
Compared to the rest of the academy, the room was small, but Marina wouldn’t have described it that way. Most of the room was carefully decorated with blue, silver, and dark wood, but one corner looked as if a set of oil paints had exploded. That corner was home to a good-sized iron cauldron and shelves stocked full of bottles, jars, and dog-eared journals.
my idea was to have everything move very fast but choppily because the pov character is in a fish-out-of-water situation but it's not good
I'm fry, and I make doodles. That's why they call me FRY DOODLES. Also no pressure but check out my YouTube channel (Fry Doodles)
I'm a disabled, neurodivergent, artsy dumpster fire who's always open to chat or share a fun fact or two. I’m ace
I'm a sensitive little sad bean. But, I'm also god's favorite princess and the most interesting girl in the world.
Crafter of Constellations, vocaloid enjoyer, waluigi’s #1 fan, space alien, and certified silly goose
That's okay. It doesn't mean you're an ineffective DM, you just need more practice. I'm sure your players think you're fine.
Hi there! My name's Elk. I'm NoiSilverheart's doppelgänger. I'm a demiromantic, socially awkward Okie who may or may not be a pyromaniac. *random confetti blast*
I'm a warlock of the ArchCrone, my patron is TheFriendlyArchfey. Was Nicknamed AchatesCervus8337 by VitusW. Given the titles "Swashbuckling Scorcher", "The Unpredictable Jedi", "Burning Fury of the Ancients", and "Combustion Knight" by DrummerBoyDragonSlayer.
Extended sig
I need to be more productive
Yo, I'm Himy (He/him) not as active as I use to be, but I'm here from time to time. I don't got much else to say.
"Like a soon to be broken man once said: You're either perfect, or you're not me."
”Be not defeated by the rain. Be not hindered by the wind. Bested by neither winter snow or summer heat.”
Hic Sunt Dracones\
Taking a bit of a break from DDB. Be back before summer
I believe the sole reason that Wednesday season two is taking so long is they are searching for the perfect episode titles with the word, ‘woe,’ in them.
i am very excited.
WTH are they called slime molds? They are neither slime nor mold
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Henlo, I am a pan, NB, chaotic ADHD mess of a furry. Also, I have a lil bean on a thread. That bean is named Ace, here is the thread
My mind has been blown, my eyes opened.
What's up?
A young storyteller who wanders the lands of lore, weaving a tale at every request. Has a lot of Cramorants. Major twenty one pilots fan. Certified Joker. Writer of Very Fishy Diaries and huge Lemony Snicket fan. He/him. A Warrior of Words, Vindicator of Vocabulary, Paladin of Poetry, and a Lancer of Language.
LOYAL FOLLOWER OF JEFF! PRAISE JEFF!!!
The Loom(my first thread)
Ello! nothing much, you?
Sig but long ^w^
Gulpmissle Day, Saturday, Feburay 15th, 2025 (They still alive, but banished to being a lurker now)
💛🤍💜🖤 🩷💛💙
Henlo, I am a pan, NB, chaotic ADHD mess of a furry. Also, I have a lil bean on a thread. That bean is named Ace, here is the thread
Sorry, had to leave.
Writing my book and drinking some tea.
A young storyteller who wanders the lands of lore, weaving a tale at every request. Has a lot of Cramorants. Major twenty one pilots fan. Certified Joker. Writer of Very Fishy Diaries and huge Lemony Snicket fan. He/him. A Warrior of Words, Vindicator of Vocabulary, Paladin of Poetry, and a Lancer of Language.
LOYAL FOLLOWER OF JEFF! PRAISE JEFF!!!
The Loom(my first thread)
Oh, that's neat. May I ask what the book is about?
Sig but long ^w^
Gulpmissle Day, Saturday, Feburay 15th, 2025 (They still alive, but banished to being a lurker now)
💛🤍💜🖤 🩷💛💙
Henlo, I am a pan, NB, chaotic ADHD mess of a furry. Also, I have a lil bean on a thread. That bean is named Ace, here is the thread
Basically there is an evil king named Rayn who bound his soul to his body so he is now immortal, and they overheard vital information. Also, the main character is the Cursed Messiah, meaning he is cursed with many burdens, but also hosen to defeat Rayn. I wrote the first version last year, but it sucked, so I restarted this year, and now am in the editing phase. Imma try to get it published one day.
Rayn is actually possessed by an ancient being named Colsez, who got corrupted by an ancient-er being named Kridth, the Father of all Evil. He is gonna suck Colsez out of Rayn into himself, and then his girlfriend, another blessed and cursed person, is gonna kill him, so Colsez dies inside of him.
A young storyteller who wanders the lands of lore, weaving a tale at every request. Has a lot of Cramorants. Major twenty one pilots fan. Certified Joker. Writer of Very Fishy Diaries and huge Lemony Snicket fan. He/him. A Warrior of Words, Vindicator of Vocabulary, Paladin of Poetry, and a Lancer of Language.
LOYAL FOLLOWER OF JEFF! PRAISE JEFF!!!
The Loom(my first thread)
That's pretty epic. If ya ever publish it, I can't wait to read it!
Sig but long ^w^
Gulpmissle Day, Saturday, Feburay 15th, 2025 (They still alive, but banished to being a lurker now)
💛🤍💜🖤 🩷💛💙
Henlo, I am a pan, NB, chaotic ADHD mess of a furry. Also, I have a lil bean on a thread. That bean is named Ace, here is the thread
Thanks :) I'm gonna try to make it into four books, cause there's a lot that I have planned out. It is called Journey: Rise of the Soul Bound.
Have you ever written anything like that/completely unrelated?
A young storyteller who wanders the lands of lore, weaving a tale at every request. Has a lot of Cramorants. Major twenty one pilots fan. Certified Joker. Writer of Very Fishy Diaries and huge Lemony Snicket fan. He/him. A Warrior of Words, Vindicator of Vocabulary, Paladin of Poetry, and a Lancer of Language.
LOYAL FOLLOWER OF JEFF! PRAISE JEFF!!!
The Loom(my first thread)
Yeah kinda. Basically a bestiary with lore is the biggest thing I wrote
Sig but long ^w^
Gulpmissle Day, Saturday, Feburay 15th, 2025 (They still alive, but banished to being a lurker now)
💛🤍💜🖤 🩷💛💙
Henlo, I am a pan, NB, chaotic ADHD mess of a furry. Also, I have a lil bean on a thread. That bean is named Ace, here is the thread
Just saw a video that talked about e631(Flavoring) and I checked the comments. Yep. Someone did a funny in the comments...
Sig but long ^w^
Gulpmissle Day, Saturday, Feburay 15th, 2025 (They still alive, but banished to being a lurker now)
💛🤍💜🖤 🩷💛💙
Henlo, I am a pan, NB, chaotic ADHD mess of a furry. Also, I have a lil bean on a thread. That bean is named Ace, here is the thread
I apparently have a mustache now
Yo, I'm Himy (He/him) not as active as I use to be, but I'm here from time to time. I don't got much else to say.
"Like a soon to be broken man once said: You're either perfect, or you're not me."
”Be not defeated by the rain. Be not hindered by the wind. Bested by neither winter snow or summer heat.”
Hic Sunt Dracones\
Taking a bit of a break from DDB. Be back before summer
Nice job lil bro.
Nice! I've written a few of those, all of them started projects but never finished.
A young storyteller who wanders the lands of lore, weaving a tale at every request. Has a lot of Cramorants. Major twenty one pilots fan. Certified Joker. Writer of Very Fishy Diaries and huge Lemony Snicket fan. He/him. A Warrior of Words, Vindicator of Vocabulary, Paladin of Poetry, and a Lancer of Language.
LOYAL FOLLOWER OF JEFF! PRAISE JEFF!!!
The Loom(my first thread)
I feel like ddb needs more taverns.
The great Silver Dragon Lord of the Sky, Second in Command of the Dragon Cult, Warlock of Cyno, and Cultist of Jeff. I have a lot of allegiances… I use He/They pronouns and you can usually find me on the Camp Half-Blood thread in Adohands Kitchen.
PRAISE JEFF!
(That was a link. Click. Now.)
I have a few tavern ideas. Wanna help me with them?
Sig but long ^w^
Gulpmissle Day, Saturday, Feburay 15th, 2025 (They still alive, but banished to being a lurker now)
💛🤍💜🖤 🩷💛💙
Henlo, I am a pan, NB, chaotic ADHD mess of a furry. Also, I have a lil bean on a thread. That bean is named Ace, here is the thread