HI. SO I created a race for my setting I call Mellea. I just posted it on this site and was wondering if anyone would like to take a look and tell me what you think. This is the first time ive made a race and will be using it in my campaign soon as a adversary to my players. What do you think?
Make sure to fully describe what each feature does.
Did you see it - does this take an action? Bonus action?
The Forest Cleaner - this seems quite overpowered in its current form, as there seems to be no limit on the amount of healing that can be gained from a single corpse. This would seem to lead to a situation where any character of this race is automatically at full hit points if they were victorious in a fight, as they would heal off the corpses of their defeated opponents. Maybe consider something lower like healing for a number of hit points equal to their proficiency bonus and having that as a limit per corpse, or perhaps make time a limiting constraint, so it takes an hour to heal off a corpse?
Did you see it - Now is specified as an action. Meant to be used right before jumping into a fight or ambush I think making it an action balances it out some.
The Forest Cleaner - now only heals a max of the dead creatures max hitpoints and only heals 1+proficiency per turn.
Thank you again so much for the suggestions. This helps alot.
Oh um so im making a character sheet with this and for some reason the racial trait increased the stat of wisdom by 2, but I double checked it and its only suppose to increase it by 1. Do you know why it would do that?
Head light: please specify the type of light (bright or dim). I suspect dim light would be more appropriate.
Did you see it: could use a little cleaning up wording wise. The last 3 sentences could be written as 1 sentence with rewording, and you should put a tooltip for blur. Since blur already requires concentration, you just need to say its duration increases.
Forest cleaner: in my opinion the limitations of the burrowing speed should be listed under a separate ability from the HP recovery aspect of this ability. And I think there should be a smaller upper limit on the HP gain potentially tied to your constitution modifier and/or level.
Alignment: you mention they are seen as chaotic evil while suggesting they are not, but dont mention their actual alignment (which I suspect would be chaotic neutral).
Languages: not being able to talk is a pretty big handicap for a playable race. Not insurmountable, but I just felt the need to say that.
Speed: it is a bit slow. You could add 5 to its walking speed and put it on par with halflings.
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HI. SO I created a race for my setting I call Mellea. I just posted it on this site and was wondering if anyone would like to take a look and tell me what you think. This is the first time ive made a race and will be using it in my campaign soon as a adversary to my players. What do you think?
Link to race bellow.
https://www.dndbeyond.com/homebrew/races?filter-name=mellea&filter-author=&filter-author-previous=&filter-author-symbol=&filter-rating=-13
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D&D Beyond FoundersHi there axe11154,
interesting - I like it!
Here's some suggestions:
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Ive made some changes based on your suggestions.
Did you see it - Now is specified as an action. Meant to be used right before jumping into a fight or ambush I think making it an action balances it out some.
The Forest Cleaner - now only heals a max of the dead creatures max hitpoints and only heals 1+proficiency per turn.
Thank you again so much for the suggestions. This helps alot.
Oh um so im making a character sheet with this and for some reason the racial trait increased the stat of wisdom by 2, but I double checked it and its only suppose to increase it by 1. Do you know why it would do that?
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D&D Beyond FoundersYou have two increases of +1 to wisdom configured:
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thank you.
I don't see anything particularly wrong with this race, although I have noticed some areas that need to be clarified or could be improved.
First I suggest changing the link in the post to https://www.dndbeyond.com/characters/races/81379-mellea it is shorter.
Head light: please specify the type of light (bright or dim). I suspect dim light would be more appropriate.
Did you see it: could use a little cleaning up wording wise. The last 3 sentences could be written as 1 sentence with rewording, and you should put a tooltip for blur. Since blur already requires concentration, you just need to say its duration increases.
Forest cleaner: in my opinion the limitations of the burrowing speed should be listed under a separate ability from the HP recovery aspect of this ability. And I think there should be a smaller upper limit on the HP gain potentially tied to your constitution modifier and/or level.
Alignment: you mention they are seen as chaotic evil while suggesting they are not, but dont mention their actual alignment (which I suspect would be chaotic neutral).
Languages: not being able to talk is a pretty big handicap for a playable race. Not insurmountable, but I just felt the need to say that.
Speed: it is a bit slow. You could add 5 to its walking speed and put it on par with halflings.