I am not a native English speaker and was wondering if I could get feedback on a magical item I created. My first attempt of creation on the platform, I would appreciate any input.
Thank you
Wondrous Item, common
A magical Writing Feather use to make copies of the nonmagical text, maps, and other writing and drawing. The wielder needs to focus on the object he wants to make a copy of. To copy a map or drawing the user needs to concentrate for 1 minute on holding the Copying Feather of Light of Mal`Celta in hand and providing copying material takes 1 minute to magically make a copy. To copy a simple sheet of text from parchment or paper (ex: notes or the page of a book). the user needs to focus on the page to make a copy of it. The user doesn't have to understand the language to make a copy of a text. copying material necessary related to paper or parchment cost from the player`s handbook
Chang it from 3rd person to 2nd person. In other words, change all of the “the wielder” and he/she to “you” like the official ones have it. Makes reading it easier. Try this:
This magic quill can be used to make copies of nonmagical text, maps, and other writings or drawings. You do not need to be able to read the writing, if any, for Mal`Celta's Copying Feather of Light to make a copy. You must have access to the original for the entire duration, and must provide a suitable material for the copy such as paper or parchment.
To make a copy, you must maintain concentration on a single image or page of text for 1 minute while holding Mal`Celta's Copying Feather of Light. At the end of that minute, an exact duplicate of the original writing or image magically appears on the material provided.
I am not a native English speaker and was wondering if I could get feedback on a magical item I created. My first attempt of creation on the platform, I would appreciate any input.
Thank you
A magical Writing Feather use to make copies of the nonmagical text, maps, and other writing and drawing. The wielder needs to focus on the object he wants to make a copy of. To copy a map or drawing the user needs to concentrate for 1 minute on holding the Copying Feather of Light of Mal`Celta in hand and providing copying material takes 1 minute to magically make a copy. To copy a simple sheet of text from parchment or paper (ex: notes or the page of a book). the user needs to focus on the page to make a copy of it. The user doesn't have to understand the language to make a copy of a text. copying material necessary related to paper or parchment cost from the player`s handbook
Looks good. Maybe change all he and she to they.
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Chang it from 3rd person to 2nd person. In other words, change all of the “the wielder” and he/she to “you” like the official ones have it. Makes reading it easier. Try this:
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Thank you very much, will apply the changes.