so, im new to the forums, but thought it would be cool to have my first thread be about my race.
this is the Tzaangor race, and is from warhammer. i love warhammer and am getting back into dnd, so i thought why not make a warhammer dnd character. Tzaangors are in both age of sigmar and 40k, i play 40k though. thousand sons.
anyway, here is the link to the race, hope you like it!
its has a couple of interesting ideas for features, nice job on those, but you forgot to give it increases to ability scores, a speed, size, general alignment, and languages
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yeah, making homebrew can be tough, i like to have examples of anything i make next to me just to double check
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there is no berserker class, instead of the bonus to strength rolls add plus 2 to strength and you cannot try to force a personality on to players but i am unfamiliar with warhammer
You may want to capitalize the name of the race in the titles, instead of in the text.
Maybe get rid of bloodthirst and change the Ability Score increase to this: Your Strength score increases by 2, and another ability score of your choice increases by 1.
Maybe change size to: Tzaangors are slightly taller than most humans, ranging from 6 to 7 feet tall. Your size is Medium.
You could change speed to 30 ft., which is the average.
You could change alignment to this: As servants of the god of chaos, Tzaangors tend to lean towards more chaotic alignments.
Maybe change hit and run to: Once per turn, when you make a melee attack, you can dash as a bonus action.
And change languages to: You can speak, read, and write Common and Draconic.
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thanks for the suggestions! i will probably implement it. i do have one thing to say though, i am keeping the walking speed at 40, they are fast
Ok, yeah. I have never played Warhammer, and was just trying to help you make the race balanced and easily understandable.
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I’m going to let you know right now that if you make a race with a subrace and publish it, if you then make a new version to tulip stuff, the subclass ace will not get ported to the new version. The same may happen to Variant Races as well, I’m not sure.
My recommendation is to always hold off on publishing until you know you have worked all the bugs out. That will save you from potential headaches down the line.
If you want to get feedback on your ‘brew you can simply drag highlight the text, copy it, and paste it into a forum post here. People will be able to read it without having to follow a link, and you will be able to edit your homebrew without having to republish it a bunch and potentially loose some of your work.
maybe add the ability to disengage or dash for hit and run, as opportunity attacks can stop hit and run tactics pretty quickly
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NNCHRIS: SOUL THIEF, MASTER OF THE ARCANE, AND KING OF NEW YORKNN Gdl Creator of Ilheia and her Knights of the Fallen Stars ldG Lesser Student of Technomancy [undergrad student in computer science] Supporter of the 2014 rules, and a MASSIVE Homebrewer. Come to me all ye who seek salvation in wording thy brews! Open to homebrew trades at any time!! Or feel free to request HB, and Ill see if I can get it done for ya! Characters (Outdated)
so, im new to the forums, but thought it would be cool to have my first thread be about my race.
this is the Tzaangor race, and is from warhammer. i love warhammer and am getting back into dnd, so i thought why not make a warhammer dnd character. Tzaangors are in both age of sigmar and 40k, i play 40k though. thousand sons.
anyway, here is the link to the race, hope you like it!
https://www.dndbeyond.com/races/542293-tzaangor
i lik warhammer, giby muny
its has a couple of interesting ideas for features, nice job on those, but you forgot to give it increases to ability scores, a speed, size, general alignment, and languages
NNCHRIS: SOUL THIEF, MASTER OF THE ARCANE, AND KING OF NEW YORKNN
Gdl Creator of Ilheia and her Knights of the Fallen Stars ldG
Lesser Student of Technomancy [undergrad student in computer science]
Supporter of the 2014 rules, and a MASSIVE Homebrewer. Come to me all ye who seek salvation in wording thy brews!
Open to homebrew trades at any time!! Or feel free to request HB, and Ill see if I can get it done for ya!
Characters (Outdated)
thanks, as i said, this was my first new race, but ill be sure to work on that!
i lik warhammer, giby muny
yeah, making homebrew can be tough, i like to have examples of anything i make next to me just to double check
NNCHRIS: SOUL THIEF, MASTER OF THE ARCANE, AND KING OF NEW YORKNN
Gdl Creator of Ilheia and her Knights of the Fallen Stars ldG
Lesser Student of Technomancy [undergrad student in computer science]
Supporter of the 2014 rules, and a MASSIVE Homebrewer. Come to me all ye who seek salvation in wording thy brews!
Open to homebrew trades at any time!! Or feel free to request HB, and Ill see if I can get it done for ya!
Characters (Outdated)
here, i fixed those things, i also added a variant.
https://www.dndbeyond.com/races/542342-tzaangor
i lik warhammer, giby muny
there is no berserker class, instead of the bonus to strength rolls add plus 2 to strength and you cannot try to force a personality on to players but i am unfamiliar with warhammer
Edit: fixed typos
I am leader of the yep cult:https://www.dndbeyond.com/forums/off-topic/adohands-kitchen/82135-yep-cult Pronouns are she/her
You may want to capitalize the name of the race in the titles, instead of in the text.
Maybe get rid of bloodthirst and change the Ability Score increase to this: Your Strength score increases by 2, and another ability score of your choice increases by 1.
Maybe change size to: Tzaangors are slightly taller than most humans, ranging from 6 to 7 feet tall. Your size is Medium.
You could change speed to 30 ft., which is the average.
You could change alignment to this: As servants of the god of chaos, Tzaangors tend to lean towards more chaotic alignments.
Maybe change hit and run to: Once per turn, when you make a melee attack, you can dash as a bonus action.
And change languages to: You can speak, read, and write Common and Draconic.
All stars fade. Some stars forever fall.
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If there was no light, people wouldn't fear the dark.
thanks for the suggestions! i will probably implement it. i do have one thing to say though, i am keeping the walking speed at 40, they are fast
i lik warhammer, giby muny
Ok, yeah. I have never played Warhammer, and was just trying to help you make the race balanced and easily understandable.
All stars fade. Some stars forever fall.
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If there was no light, people wouldn't fear the dark.
i know i cant force player to play as beserker, but remember, this is my first race, so i dont really know what i can and cant do
i lik warhammer, giby muny
ok, the third version of tzaangor!
https://www.dndbeyond.com/races/542414-tzaangor
thanks for all the suggestions, they helped!
a example Tzaangor:
https://www.dndbeyond.com/profile/harbinger_of_change/characters/38849352
i lik warhammer, giby muny
I’m going to let you know right now that if you make a race with a subrace and publish it, if you then make a new version to tulip stuff, the subclass ace will not get ported to the new version. The same may happen to Variant Races as well, I’m not sure.
My recommendation is to always hold off on publishing until you know you have worked all the bugs out. That will save you from potential headaches down the line.
If you want to get feedback on your ‘brew you can simply drag highlight the text, copy it, and paste it into a forum post here. People will be able to read it without having to follow a link, and you will be able to edit your homebrew without having to republish it a bunch and potentially loose some of your work.
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it is too weak maybe one or 2 more features but i dont know about warhammer 40k so i cant help any more
I am leader of the yep cult:https://www.dndbeyond.com/forums/off-topic/adohands-kitchen/82135-yep-cult Pronouns are she/her
maybe add the ability to disengage or dash for hit and run, as opportunity attacks can stop hit and run tactics pretty quickly
NNCHRIS: SOUL THIEF, MASTER OF THE ARCANE, AND KING OF NEW YORKNN
Gdl Creator of Ilheia and her Knights of the Fallen Stars ldG
Lesser Student of Technomancy [undergrad student in computer science]
Supporter of the 2014 rules, and a MASSIVE Homebrewer. Come to me all ye who seek salvation in wording thy brews!
Open to homebrew trades at any time!! Or feel free to request HB, and Ill see if I can get it done for ya!
Characters (Outdated)
I agree
When players get creative.