(Oh that game you play a lot on roblox, what type of game is it? RP? Combat?)
Yup. RPG, exploration-based. The endgame is all combat. It’s really difficult, though. The combat is skill-based and takes a lot of getting used to, and it’s permadeath — limited respawning, and a lag spike at the wrong time can wipe hours of progress. Actually played it today for the first time in a while — I wiped a lot. It was painful, but also fun.
I’ll stop yapping, lol. It’s just fun to talk about for me.
Don’t stop if you don’t want to, I practically pump quotes no one else knows lol, but I do it since I enjoy it
(Oh that game you play a lot on roblox, what type of game is it? RP? Combat?)
Yup. RPG, exploration-based. The endgame is all combat. It’s really difficult, though. The combat is skill-based and takes a lot of getting used to, and it’s permadeath — limited respawning, and a lag spike at the wrong time can wipe hours of progress. Actually played it today for the first time in a while — I wiped a lot. It was painful, but also fun.
I’ll stop yapping, lol. It’s just fun to talk about for me.
Don’t stop if you don’t want to, I practically pump quotes no one else knows lol, but I do it since I enjoy it
Thinking about an old race I made, the Gwujad, and wondering how I should rework it. I think I've got the mechanics down, I just need to change the lore a bit. There are some glaring holes that my brother pointed out.
Thinking about an old race I made, the Gwujad, and wondering how I should rework it. I think I've got the mechanics down, I just need to change the lore a bit. There are some glaring holes that my brother pointed out.
As you said, the mechanics seem well-balanced. Toughness of flesh is strong, but I wouldn’t say it’s too OP.
The lore just seems basic. Celestial warriors tainted by their interactions with demons or devils — it’s been done to death. In addition, the writing itself doesn’t really stand up to the kind of lore you write now. You repeat words and sometimes go for several lines using the same structure in each sentence (such as the third paragraph of “legendary monsters.” (I’m not trying to offend. I mean it more as a compliment — your writing is so good the bar is now raised.)
If it were me, I’d rewrite “legendary monsters” entirely, and use what you already have as a guideline only. The culture section is really interesting — flesh it out, maybe write a little sidebar about some more notable members of the race to then use as inspiration.
Of course, this is your race, not mine. Just some thoughts I felt like sharing.
Thinking about an old race I made, the Gwujad, and wondering how I should rework it. I think I've got the mechanics down, I just need to change the lore a bit. There are some glaring holes that my brother pointed out.
As you said, the mechanics seem well-balanced. Toughness of flesh is strong, but I wouldn’t say it’s too OP.
The lore just seems basic. Celestial warriors tainted by their interactions with demons or devils — it’s been done to death. In addition, the writing itself doesn’t really stand up to the kind of lore you write now. You repeat words and sometimes go for several lines using the same structure in each sentence (such as the third paragraph of “legendary monsters.” (I’m not trying to offend. I mean it more as a compliment — your writing is so good the bar is now raised.)
If it were me, I’d rewrite “legendary monsters” entirely, and use what you already have as a guideline only. The culture section is really interesting — flesh it out, maybe write a little sidebar about some more notable members of the race to then use as inspiration.
Of course, this is your race, not mine. Just some thoughts I felt like sharing.
No no, I understand entirely. It's over a year old, and I've improved since then. I know I can do better now, I just want to know how another writer like yourself would change it.
I've been trying to think of ideas. One of them follows the same basic principal of holy warriors vs. the Abyss, except for one major change: they lost. They retreated in terror, and as punishment were banished to the foulest corners of the earth. They've been there for generations, serving their sentences as abyssal corruption seeped into their blood from the wounds they endured. No one told them that their sentence was up, but they've started to come back on their own.
I really like Toughness of Flesh. It's their main feature, and I want to keep it that way. It's not magic resistance, but it's pretty close with how cool it is.
Hey, I’m moon, i‘m aged between 3 and 300. Pronouns are She/They/It/It’s/Them/Her. I love D&D. I am chaotic neutral irl. I’m not afraid to punch someone. Mess with me and you’ll find out the hard way. extended sig
I am the goddess of the moon, the tides, and the axolotls
Hey, Nothic. Nice to see you here so late.
Let him who is without sin cast the first stone.
Awake, impure, divine
Breathgiver of the Strugels
Hey, Baalz. How have you been?
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Hey, aren’t you supposed to go to bed earlier??
*casts Sleep on you*
Where have all the flowers gone?
Don’t stop if you don’t want to, I practically pump quotes no one else knows lol, but I do it since I enjoy it
Where have all the flowers gone?
How in Carceri do people know my timezone lol
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Gtg to bed, good night LCW
Where have all the flowers gone?
Thanks, I appreciate that :)
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Bye PJ!
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I didn’t, I was talking to baalze about the sleeping, idk how he knew tho
Where have all the flowers gone?
Weekends are when I stay up late plotting my evil schemes.
Let him who is without sin cast the first stone.
Awake, impure, divine
Breathgiver of the Strugels
Thinking about an old race I made, the Gwujad, and wondering how I should rework it. I think I've got the mechanics down, I just need to change the lore a bit. There are some glaring holes that my brother pointed out.
Let him who is without sin cast the first stone.
Awake, impure, divine
Breathgiver of the Strugels
I see
Where have all the flowers gone?
relatable, but i do it 24/7/365
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She/They pronouns
The Goddess of the Strings (thanks for the title Drummer!)
Relatable--
NO NOT AGAIN
Hello! I am a perfectly sane gibberer. Hi! :D
Locations are dead, the Temple of Potassium has fallen but its ideals live on
A mysterious link of chain... (Extended signature). PRAISE JEFF THE EVIL ROOMBA! REALLY cool video.
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Titles: The Echoing Story Spewer (Drummer), the Endless Maws (Isis), the Mad Murderer (PJ), more on my extended sig
Wouldn’t be surprised if he does. Drum, Yon, and Hecate all do, or at least they used to.
As you said, the mechanics seem well-balanced. Toughness of flesh is strong, but I wouldn’t say it’s too OP.
The lore just seems basic. Celestial warriors tainted by their interactions with demons or devils — it’s been done to death. In addition, the writing itself doesn’t really stand up to the kind of lore you write now. You repeat words and sometimes go for several lines using the same structure in each sentence (such as the third paragraph of “legendary monsters.” (I’m not trying to offend. I mean it more as a compliment — your writing is so good the bar is now raised.)
If it were me, I’d rewrite “legendary monsters” entirely, and use what you already have as a guideline only. The culture section is really interesting — flesh it out, maybe write a little sidebar about some more notable members of the race to then use as inspiration.
Of course, this is your race, not mine. Just some thoughts I felt like sharing.
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I wrote a fun little short story.
Ooo, wanna share?
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No no, I understand entirely. It's over a year old, and I've improved since then. I know I can do better now, I just want to know how another writer like yourself would change it.
I've been trying to think of ideas. One of them follows the same basic principal of holy warriors vs. the Abyss, except for one major change: they lost. They retreated in terror, and as punishment were banished to the foulest corners of the earth. They've been there for generations, serving their sentences as abyssal corruption seeped into their blood from the wounds they endured. No one told them that their sentence was up, but they've started to come back on their own.
I really like Toughness of Flesh. It's their main feature, and I want to keep it that way. It's not magic resistance, but it's pretty close with how cool it is.
I dunno, what do you think?
Let him who is without sin cast the first stone.
Awake, impure, divine
Breathgiver of the Strugels
Bye!
Hey, I’m moon, i‘m aged between 3 and 300. Pronouns are She/They/It/It’s/Them/Her. I love D&D. I am chaotic neutral irl. I’m not afraid to punch someone. Mess with me and you’ll find out the hard way. extended sig
I am the goddess of the moon, the tides, and the axolotls
I am not a furry, I am a fishie.
Yeah, but I’ll need to type it first. When I say I wrote something, I usually mean I just came up with it in my head.